Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing of sugar produced from sugar cane.

Overall, the process of manufacturing sugar start from growing and harvesting sugar cane crops and after going through several processes finally after drying and cooling of crystals obtained refined sugar.

This process initates by growing sugar crops for 12 to 18 months before harvesting. the sugar cane crops harvest in two ways; by hand or using machinary. Then the main process came which is crushing of sugar cane crops with the help of machine we extract sugar cane juice. Furthermore , the filtration process is done. Sugar cane juice is purified with the use of limestone filter. After that in the following stage, transfer the juice into an evaporator then Finally juice becomes syrup. To produce crystals we need to spin syrup at high speed in centrifuge to separate crytals. At last crystals are dried and cooled to get sugar crystals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. Your overview also identifies the process’s beginning and final outcome, and you include relevant details such as the two harvesting methods and the limestone filter. This gives the account clear coverage of the diagram. To make the description more fully developed, explain the transformations and outputs more precisely: for example, state explicitly that evaporation turns the juice into syrup and that the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from the remaining syrup. The final phrase “get sugar crystals” is accurate in broad terms, but the diagram labels the end product as sugar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The stages are presented in a logical sequence, and the opening overview helps the reader understand the process as a whole. Sequencing expressions such as “Overall,” “Then,” “After that,” and “At last” make the progression easy to follow. This is a coherent arrangement, though some links feel mechanical or are not attached to complete, clearly structured sentences. For instance, “After that in the following stage, transfer the juice into an evaporator then Finally…” combines several transitions and leaves the subject unclear. Paragraphing is also limited: separating the overview from the detailed stages, then grouping the later processing steps, would make the organisation more deliberate. Use fewer repeated time markers and connect stages through clear references to the material being processed.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge,” so the reader can follow the manufacturing stages. Some less common terms are attempted, but inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations reduce precision: “machinary” should be “machinery,” “cry tals” (written as “crytals”) should be “crystals,” and “spin syrup at high speed” is less natural than “rotate the syrup in a centrifuge.” There is also repetition of “sugar cane crops” and “process.” Aim for concise, conventional process language, such as “the cane is crushed to extract juice” and “the crystals are dried and cooled.” These refinements would make the vocabulary more accurate and flexible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex structures, including a time clause (“before harvesting”) and a purpose clause (“To produce crystals…”). However, control is uneven, and errors occur in several sentence patterns. For example, “the process … start” needs subject–verb agreement (“starts”), while “the sugar cane crops harvest” needs a passive form (“are harvested”). The overview sentence beginning “Overall” is difficult to control because its clauses are joined without a clear grammatical structure. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention, as in “the sugar cane crops” after a full stop and “Furthermore ,”. Practise accurate passive constructions for process descriptions and check each sentence for a clear subject and finite verb; this will help make your attempted complex sentences easier to understand.

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