Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrates how sugar is extracted from the sugar cane through the production process.

Overall,The process can be catergorized as two stages.The first stage has mainly done in the field,wherease the latter stage completes in the factory or production house.

At the primary stage,First sugar canes requires to 12-18 months to grow,next after the waiting period is over farmers use equipment such as heavy knifes,tractors machinery to collect the sugarcane.

Now about secondary steps collected sugarcanes are squeezed to extract the juice using a machine in a short time.To purifiying the extracted liquid limestone filter which facilitates to get the pure pulp.After that heat is given to evaporator the juice and turns into syrup to make it thick.Later, to separate the sugar from syrup centrifuge steps need to follow.Lastly by drying and cooling sugar extraction process is ended.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence from growing through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, separation and final drying/cooling, and the overview usefully distinguishes field and factory stages. The 12–18-month growing period is also reported accurately. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: harvesting is described as using “heavy knifes” and tractor machinery, whereas the diagram shows mechanical and manual harvesting; purification produces filtered juice, not “pure pulp.” The centrifuge’s role in separating sugar crystals from syrup could also be stated more precisely. The response is 11 words below the required minimum, which limits the development of the process details. To strengthen the report, clarify the outputs at each stage and include the diagram’s key distinctions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs covering the growing/harvesting and processing stages. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “After that,” “Later,” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the process. However, some links feel mechanical or unclear, particularly “Now about secondary steps,” and the long final paragraph compresses several distinct stages into one sentence. Punctuation and spacing also make transitions harder to read, as in “Overall,The process” and “At the primary stage,First.” Use clearer paragraphing for the factory stages and connect each step with concise, accurate transitions. This would make the progression smoother and reduce the need for the reader to infer relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “extracted,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the stages. There is also some attempt to vary wording, for example “production process” and “sugar extraction process.” However, several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward: “pure pulp” misidentifies the product of filtration, “heavy knifes” does not describe the manual harvesting tool naturally, and “sugarcanes” is less appropriate than “sugar cane” or “sugar canes.” Spelling errors such as “catergorized” and “purifiying” are noticeable. Aim for precise process terms and check spelling and collocations; this will make the description clearer without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning is generally recoverable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “sugar canes requires” should use a plural verb, while “To purifiying the extracted liquid limestone filter” lacks a clear grammatical structure. “After that heat is given to evaporator the juice and turns into syrup” also has an unclear subject and missing grammatical links. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the comma splice-like run-on in the final processing description. Practise building accurate passive process sentences, such as “The juice is heated in an evaporator and becomes syrup,” and proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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