Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with growing and culminating drying and cooling. its is a linear process, which includes purification of juice, evaporation and drying and cooling.

Initially, the sugar cane is grown for 12 to 18 months. After that, it is harvested by hand or by using tractors. Then the sugar cane is crushed to extract juice from it. The juice is then purified using a limestone filter.

Furthermore, the purified juice is evaporated by heating until it transforms into syrup. The syrup is processed in a centrifuge, which separates the crystals from the syrup. Finally, the syrup is dried and cooled, which results in sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the process as seven stages and give a clear overview from growing to drying and cooling. The main sequence is mostly accurate, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, heating and centrifuging. However, some details are less fully or precisely reported: the final stage dries and cools the separated sugar crystals, not the syrup, and the overview could better capture the transformation from cane to juice, syrup and sugar. The response is also 28 words below the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to develop the process description. Add a little more detail about the outputs at each stage while keeping the account concise and factual.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by the early stages and then the later stages. Sequencing words such as “Initially,” “After that,” “Then,” and “Finally” make the process easy to follow, and the paragraph break helps distinguish the overview from the details. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger progression. However, “Furthermore” is not the most natural link for the next step in a continuous process, and the overview repeats stage names without adding much synthesis. The short description also leaves some transitions between outputs implicit. Use a consistent sequence of linking expressions and connect each stage explicitly to what it produces.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “manufacturing process,” “harvested,” “extract,” “limestone filter,” “evaporated,” and “centrifuge.” These terms communicate the main stages clearly, and the technical vocabulary is generally appropriate to the diagram. Some phrasing is repetitive or imprecise, however: “manufacturing process of making” is redundant, and “the syrup is dried and cooled” misidentifies the material at the final stage. “Tractors” is also less precise than describing mechanical harvesting. Aim for concise process collocations and name the material being processed accurately at each point. This would make the description more precise and natural without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including the passive constructions “is grown,” “is harvested,” and “is purified,” which suit a process description. Most sentences are understandable, and the sequence of actions is expressed clearly. Some errors remain: the overview has a sentence-initial lowercase “its,” and “culminating drying and cooling” needs a grammatical link, such as “culminating in drying and cooling.” The phrase “which results in sugar” also has an unclear reference because the preceding subject is the syrup being dried and cooled. Review sentence boundaries, capitalization, and the grammatical links between stages. Greater accuracy in these areas would strengthen an otherwise clear mix of sentence forms.

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