Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The picture below shows how the sugar is manufactured.this picture gives the detailed information about the sugar manufacturing.there are multiple steps involved,

The sugarcane crop takes lot of water to grow.for growing the sugarcane it takes time between 12 to 18 months based on the weather.after growing the sugarcane the sugarcane is harvested and ships to the factory there the juice is extracted from the sugarcane.after the sugarcane waste is dried.the sugarcane juice is purified using the limestone filter and taken into utensils.the sugarcane juice is boiled using the sugarcane waste.after the juice is thickened,after that the sugar is separated using some process.the suagr is cooled and distributed the shops nearby.there is also another advange that ethanol fuel is created using this sugarcane waste.

finally the farmer gets money by selling the sugar.the sugar is created from the multistep.the sugar syrup is also used to create jaggery.the jaagery is good to health when compared to suagar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the general subject and include two accurate details: sugar cane grows for 12–18 months, and the juice is purified with a limestone filter. However, the process is only partly described. The diagram’s key stages—crushing the cane, evaporating the juice into syrup, separating crystals in a centrifuge, and drying and cooling the sugar—are not clearly reported. Instead, you add unsupported information about water use, waste being used as fuel, shops, farmers’ earnings, and jaggery. These additions distract from the visual information, and there is no clear overview of the complete sequence. Focus on the stages shown and summarise the process from cultivation to the final sugar product.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic chronological direction, moving from growing the crop towards processing and the final product. This gives the reader some sense of sequence. However, the ideas are presented largely as one continuous block, with no clear paragraphing or distinct overview. Linking is also repetitive and sometimes awkward: several stages are joined with “after” or “after that,” while “finally” introduces extra information rather than a concise conclusion to the diagram. The shifts to ethanol, selling sugar, and jaggery interrupt the process description. Organise the response into an introduction and overview, followed by a clearly ordered account of the stages, using precise links such as “next,” “subsequently,” and “in the final stage.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “purified,” “limestone filter,” and “separated,” so the reader can recognise the topic. However, the range is limited and several expressions are vague or repetitive, such as “some process,” “multiple steps,” and “taken into utensils.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “suagr,” “advange,” and “jaagery,” and some word choices do not accurately describe the diagram. More precise terms such as “crushed,” “evaporated,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals” would make the account clearer and more appropriate to a process diagram. Aim to use specific stage names rather than general phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple statements and attempts some longer sequences, for example, “after growing the sugarcane the sugarcane is harvested and ships to the factory.” However, these longer constructions are often difficult to control, and errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, and punctuation occur frequently enough to affect clarity. Examples include “the sugarcane is harvested and ships,” “the sugarcane juice is boiled,” and the run-on sequence beginning “after the juice is thickened,after that.” Capitalisation and full stops are also inconsistent. Practise forming accurate passive sentences for process descriptions, such as “The cane is harvested and transported to a factory,” and separate each stage into a complete sentence with correct punctuation.

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