Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The image illustrate the production method of sugar by sugar cane, how it stated and how it ended. Overall this process started from agriculture land and finshed product is totaly different from main one.

firstly, farmers are growing sugar canes in their fileds for 12 to 18 months after that they need to harvesting but in some cases cutting sugar cane sticks by hand and that is time taking on other hand michains are also use for harvesting. Now they need sugar cane juice with the the help of crusher, then crushing prosess is completed.

Sugar cane jusice have some impuroties by the help of limestine filter they purifying juice, then that is time to convert into syrup with the help of heater this meathod called evaporator more over then centrifuge method stated in which separates sugar crystals from syrup in last with the help of drying and cooling method final product is ready that crystals called sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview also recognises that the process changes cane into a different final product. This meets the task well, and the stage descriptions are generally relevant. To make the account more complete and precise, clarify what happens at key transitions: for example, the evaporator turns juice into syrup, while the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from the remaining syrup. The phrase “final product is totally different from main one” is vague; a concise overview identifying the process as a sequence from cultivation to sugar production would better highlight its overall nature.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response follows the diagram’s sequence, and the use of “firstly,” “after that,” “then,” and “in last” helps readers track the stages. Separating the opening overview from the process description also gives the response a basic structure. However, the body is presented as two long paragraphs with several stages crowded into single sentences, so the links between purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying are not always easy to follow. Some connectors are awkward or repetitive, particularly “more over then.” Use one clear stage per sentence or group related stages into shorter paragraphs, and choose precise transitions such as “Next” and “Finally.” This would make the progression smoother and reduce the mechanical feel of the linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crusher,” “filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals,” which allows the reader to identify most stages. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural expressions are noticeable, such as “finshed,” “michains,” “jusice,” and “limestine.” Some word choices also obscure meaning: “agriculture land” and “main one” do not clearly describe the starting material or the process. Aim for accurate forms such as “agricultural land,” “machines,” “juice,” and “limestone,” and use standard process collocations like “the cane is crushed” and “the juice is purified.” Greater accuracy and precision would make this vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the sequence is usually understandable. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. For example, “The image illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “they need to harvesting” has an incorrect verb pattern. The opening sentence, “The image illustrate the production method of sugar by sugar cane, how it stated and how it ended,” is also difficult to follow because its clauses are not joined clearly. Several sentences run together, particularly the description beginning “Sugar cane jusice have some impuroties.” Practise accurate passive forms for processes, such as “the juice is purified,” and use full stops to separate stages. These changes would improve clarity while allowing you to retain more complex sentence forms.

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