Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram demonstrates the process of manufacturing sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the whole process contains of seven steps.

According to the diagram, the process starts with growing of sugar canes for about 12 to 18 months. They are then harvested either by the Harvester machine or manually. In the third step, the juice is extracted from sugar canes by a machine and the process is known as crushing. After extraction, the purification of the juice occurs. The purification is done by a limestone filter. In the next step, the juice is converted into syrup by heating it into an evaporator. After the evaporation is being done, a centrifuge is used to separate sugar crystals from the syrup being prepared. In the 7th and the last step, the drying and cooling occurs. Sugar is now prepared and ready to eat.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main sequence and include useful details, such as the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, limestone filtration, evaporation and centrifuging. The overview that there are seven steps is relevant, but it would be stronger if it also summarised the transformation from cane to juice, syrup and finally sugar. Some descriptions are imprecise: “Sugar is now prepared and ready to eat” adds a use not shown in the diagram, and the final stage is specifically drying and cooling. The response is also 10 words below the required minimum. Develop the overview and describe the final product without adding unsupported information to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The stages are presented in a logical order, and sequencing phrases such as “In the third step,” “In the next step” and “In the 7th and the last step” help the reader follow the process. The response is coherent overall, with each stage connected to the next. However, the paragraphing is limited to a brief overview followed by one long sequence, and the repeated step-by-step transitions make the progression somewhat mechanical. Grouping the stages into clear paragraphs—for example, cultivation and extraction, followed by processing—would improve organisation. You could also use references such as “the resulting juice” or “this syrup” to link stages more smoothly and avoid repeating “the process” and “the juice.”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for describing a process, and terms such as “harvested,” “extracted,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator” and “centrifuge” show relevant topic knowledge. Some choices are less natural or precise, however. “The whole process contains of seven steps” uses an unsuitable verb pattern, while “sugar canes” is less idiomatic than “sugar cane” when referring to the crop. “Sugar is now prepared and ready to eat” is also an imprecise description of the diagram’s final output. There is some repetition of “process,” “juice” and “step.” Aim for more precise process vocabulary and natural collocations, while retaining the useful technical terms you already use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the passive in “They are then harvested” and the purpose/result structure in “a centrifuge is used to separate sugar crystals from the syrup.” Most sentences communicate the stages clearly. Some grammatical errors remain, including “the whole process contains of seven steps,” where the verb pattern is incorrect, and “the juice is converted into syrup by heating it into an evaporator,” where the construction is faulty. “After the evaporation is being done” also combines forms awkwardly, and “the drying and cooling occurs” has a subject–verb agreement error. Review verb patterns, passive constructions and agreement, and vary sentence structures while keeping them accurate.

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