Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram below illustrates that what are the manufacturing process required for making sugar through sugar cane and how it works one by one.

Firstly, sugar cane starts to grow a sugar cane in around 12 to 18 months. Followed by Harvesting process begin where farmer cut the sugar cane from soil manually and by machine crane put in that, after that cane go to the cutting machine and crush sugar cane one by one and produce juice in to the bucket. Purifiying juice filter out whole drink which made by sugar cane with the help of Limestone filter.

Evaporator which is known as juice becomes syrup through heat consumption. second last stage is Centrifuge is a rolling process which comes after the syrup process who separates sugar crystals from syrup with the help of circulation. In addition, Drying and cooling process starts to make a sugar in a large bucket.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main stages, including the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. This gives the reader a basic account of the process, and the limestone filter and separation of crystals from syrup are relevant details. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the process as a whole, and several stages are described inaccurately or unclearly: for example, the diagram shows harvesting by machine or by hand, not a “machine crane,” and the final stage is not described as making sugar in a large bucket. Some key transformations, especially juice becoming syrup and the final production of sugar, need clearer explanation. A concise overview and more precise reporting of each stage would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The stages are presented in broadly chronological order, and sequencing expressions such as “Firstly,” “after that,” and “second last stage” help the reader follow the process. The paragraph break also separates the early stages from the later ones. However, the response is arranged in only two dense paragraphs, and the opening sentence does not clearly introduce the process. Some links are mechanical or awkward, particularly “Followed by Harvesting process begin” and “In addition” before the final stage. The relationship between stages would be clearer if each sentence focused on one or two steps and used consistent transitions such as “Next,” “The juice is then,” and “Finally.” This would improve progression and reduce ambiguity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use several relevant process terms, including “Limestone filter,” “Evaporator,” “Centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals,” which show an attempt to use task-specific vocabulary. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or imprecise, sometimes making the process difficult to picture. “Machine crane” does not describe the mechanical harvesting method shown, “rolling process” is not a clear description of a centrifuge, and “whole drink” is unsuitable for the juice. There are also spelling and form errors such as “Purifiying.” Aim for precise process verbs and nouns, for example “harvested mechanically,” “crushed,” “filtered,” and “separated.” This would make the vocabulary more accurate and natural while retaining the relevant technical terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect stages using longer structures, including “which is known as juice becomes syrup” and “which comes after the syrup process,” but these constructions are often faulty. The opening, “illustrates that what are the manufacturing process,” has an incorrect clause structure, while “sugar cane starts to grow a sugar cane” contains an unnecessary object and unclear verb pattern. Other problems include missing or incorrect articles and agreement, as in “Evaporator” and “Centrifuge is,” and inconsistent tense and sentence boundaries. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships between stages hard to understand. Use straightforward passive forms consistently—for example, “The cane is harvested, then crushed”—and check each sentence for a clear subject, verb, and complete clause.

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