Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The process chart illustrate the manufacturing process for making sugar using sugar cane.

Overall, there are seven total steps of producing sugar using sugar cane. Sugar cane is the only raw material used in this process of production which starts by growing the sugar cane and ends with drying and cooling of the final product.

Initially, sugar cane are grown for about 12-18 months before harvesting them using harvesting machine or just by using sickle by some people. After that, sugar cane is crushed using machine to make sugarcane juice and then the juice is purified using limestone filter to seperate the excess material.

In the fifth process, filtered sugar cane juice is heated in an evaporator until the juice turns into fine syrup. After that in sixth process, the product is centrifuged to seperate the sugar crystals from syrup. Finally, the sygar is dried and cooled in a container to finish the process.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the full sequence and include the key details: the 12–18-month growing period, two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview correctly identifies the start and end points and notes that sugar cane is the raw material. This gives the report a clear account of the process. Some descriptions are less precise than the diagram, however: “sickle” is not specified, and “to separate the excess material” adds an outcome not explicitly shown. The evaporator is described as producing “fine syrup,” although the diagram only indicates that the juice becomes syrup. To strengthen the response, report only what is shown and make the overview more informative by grouping the stages into preparation, processing, and finishing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible order, moving from an introduction and overview through the stages to a concluding final step. Sequencing expressions such as “Initially,” “After that,” “In the fifth process,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the diagram. The paragraphing also separates the overview from the detailed account. However, the repeated use of “After that” and numbered transitions makes the linking somewhat mechanical, and “In the fifth process” is less natural than a direct transition describing the action. Some references, such as “the product” and “the sugar,” could be more explicit about whether they mean syrup or crystals. Use a wider range of concise links and maintain clear references between stages to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushed,” “purified,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuged,” which allows you to describe the main operations. There is some repetition of “sugar cane,” “juice,” and “process,” and several choices are imprecise or unnatural for this diagram: “process chart” is less suitable than “process diagram,” “fine syrup” is not supported by the visual, and “sickle” is an unsupported specific tool. Spelling errors in “seperate” and “sygar” are noticeable, while “sugarcane juice” is not used consistently. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully; a more varied but precise set of terms would improve the report without adding unsupported detail.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the overview sentence with “which starts … and ends …” and the time clause “before harvesting them.” Most of the process remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “The process chart illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, and “Sugar cane are grown” has an agreement error. “Sugar cane is crushed … to make … and then the juice is purified” also shifts between singular and plural reference, while “in sixth process” needs an article. These errors rarely prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Review agreement with singular and plural subjects, articles before ordinal stages, and consistent reference to the material as it changes through the process.

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