Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

First of all we disscuse how sugar is produced from sugar cane.This process have some steps:

First we growing the sugar cane about 12 to 18 months when sugar cane grow we harvesting the sugar cane. Second,harvesting the sugar cane have two process first we harvest by machines which is very fast but costly either we harvest by humans which is very time taking and slow.So best option is we harvesting by machines.

Third,we crushing the sugar cane and making the juice of sugar cane by using machine.Four,we purifying the juice by using limestone filters.Fifth, we evaporating the juice and the juice becomes the syrup which is very tastefull.Sixth,we centrifuge the syrup means seperates sugar crystals from syrup.seventh,we drying and cooling the crysal which become sugar.

In summary,the process of sugar making is very intresting.

in summary, whole the process of sugar making isvery itresting and timetaking .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the process and report most of its main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. However, the response only partly fulfils the task because it lacks a clear overview of the process as a whole and adds unsupported evaluation: the diagram does not say that machine harvesting is faster but costly, that manual harvesting is slow, or that syrup is “very tastefull.” The repeated conclusion that the process is interesting does not summarise its key features. Focus on the transformation from cane to juice, syrup, and finally sugar, and describe only information shown in the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The numbered sequence (“First,” “Second,” through “seventh”) helps the reader follow the stages, and the response generally keeps the process in order. However, progression is weakened by the lack of clear paragraphing and by repetitive, mechanical linking. The opening says “First of all we disscuse,” then the body begins “First we growing,” while the ending repeats “in summary” twice and restates that the process is interesting. Some links also make the sequence harder to follow, such as “either” when contrasting harvesting methods. Organise the response into an introduction and overview, followed by a clearly ordered description of the stages, and use concise transitions rather than repeating the same sequence markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use several relevant process terms, including “limestone filters,” “evaporating,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” so the reader can recognise the main operations. However, the vocabulary range is limited and some choices are inaccurate or informal, which makes parts of the description unclear. For example, “we disscuse” is not suitable for describing a diagram, “very tastefull” is irrelevant to the process, and “cry sal” appears to be an attempt at “crystal.” There are also repeated spelling errors such as “intresting” and “timetaking.” Build a more precise process vocabulary and check spelling; alternatives such as “is processed,” “separates,” and “final product” would make the account more appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify the intended stages. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Examples include “This process have some steps,” “First we growing,” and “we evaporating the juice”; these need forms such as “has,” “first the cane grows,” and “the juice is evaporated.” The sentence beginning “Second, harvesting the sugar cane have two process” also has agreement and plural errors, while several stages run together without reliable punctuation. Practise describing processes with consistent present simple or passive forms, and separate each stage into a complete, correctly punctuated sentence.

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