Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The figure illustates the complete manufactuirng process of making sugar from sugar cane.

From growing sugar cane in the first step to drying and cooling sugar in the last step, we have a set of steps in between to follow :

Farmers grow sugare canes in their farms which takes a time period of a year and sometimes even one and half a year. After their growth they harvest and cultivate it and then crush the sugar canes in order to produce juice. Later the juice is purified by the limestone filter beacues it contain impurities.

After purifying the juice, a container filled with the purfied juice put into the heat which starts the process of evaporation which results to obtain syrup from the juice. The next step is to seperate sugar crystals from syrup which is done in the centrifuge process.

And the last step, the sugar crystals obatined in the previous step are now placed for drying and cooling and after passing certain time we can get sugar which is ready to use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers the main sequence from growing cane through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. It also includes the diagram’s 12–18-month growing period, expressed as roughly one to one and a half years. This gives the reader a generally accurate account of the process. However, some stages are less fully reported: the two harvesting methods (mechanical and manual) are not distinguished, and the limestone filter is mentioned without clearly explaining that it removes impurities. The overview identifies the beginning and end but could more clearly summarise the process as a linear, seven-stage production sequence, including the conversion of juice to syrup and separation of crystals from syrup.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The stages are presented in a sensible order, and the paragraph break helps separate the opening overview from the process details. Sequencing expressions such as “After,” “Later,” “The next step,” and “the last step” make the progression easy to follow overall. However, the linking is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, and the first detailed paragraph combines growing, harvesting, and crushing without clearly separating the stages. The colon after “to follow” is also awkward, while “And the last step” is less suitable as a formal transition. Grouping the stages into clearer paragraphs and using more varied, precise links would make the organisation smoother and the relationships between stages clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporation,” “syrup,” “sugar crystals,” and “centrifuge,” so the main production steps are generally understandable. There is some attempt to use more specific language, but several spelling errors—such as “illustates,” “manufactuirng,” “beacues,” and “obatined”—reduce accuracy. Some word choices and collocations are also imprecise: “cultivate it” does not clearly describe harvesting cane, and “results to obtain syrup” is unnatural. “After passing certain time” is vague. Aim for accurate spelling and conventional process descriptions, such as “the juice is heated until it becomes syrup” and “the crystals are then dried and cooled.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including time clauses such as “After their growth” and a relative clause in “which takes a time period…”. Most of the process remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “a container filled with the purfied juice put into the heat” lacks a finite verb and has an unclear passive construction; “it contain impurities” has a subject–verb agreement error; and “which results to obtain syrup” is not a well-formed clause. The sentence beginning “After purifying the juice” would be clearer as “The purified juice is heated in a container, causing it to evaporate into syrup.” More consistent passive forms would suit this process description and improve control.

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