Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

First of all there is almost twelve to eighteen months for the growing of sugar canes.then when these sugar canes are ready then these sugar canes with the helo of farmer or cranes harwest from thier place.then these sugar canes are send to the factory for more proocess . then these sugar canes are crushing in the crushing macine and after this process the sugar canes bacome in the form of juice.after this process the sugar canes are limestone filter for the next step.after purifying the sugar canes juice the juice are boiled or heated in the cylinder.then this juice is proper heatup on the heated cylinder .then this juice is ready for the next process.then this is centrifuge.its means its seprate the sugar crystal from the seruo.and after this stepwhen sugar crystal are seprated from syrup it bacomw in the form of sugar.and then this sugar is dryed and cooled.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main stages in the correct general order, including growing, harvesting, crushing, filtering, heating, centrifuging, and drying. You also include the growing period and explain that the centrifuge separates crystals from syrup, which are relevant details. However, the response only partially covers the diagram: it does not clearly describe the two harvesting methods, and the limestone filter is inaccurately described as the sugar cane being filtered rather than the juice. There is no clear overview of the process as a whole, and several stages are repeated or unclear, especially the heating stage. Add a concise overview and report each stage accurately and selectively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows the process broadly from cultivation to the final sugar, so the reader can recognise an overall sequence. However, progression is weakened by the repeated use of “then” and “after this process,” which makes the account sound mechanical rather than clearly organised. The response is presented as one continuous paragraph, and several links between stages are unclear—for example, “after this process the sugar canes are limestone filter” does not clearly connect the crushing and purification stages. Group the stages into a short introduction/overview and a logically ordered description, and use precise references such as “the juice” and “the resulting syrup” to make connections clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “crushing machine,” “limestone filter,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystal,” which helps convey the process. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are inaccurate or repeated, such as “proper heatup,” “seruo,” and “sugar canes are limestone filter.” Frequent spelling errors—including “harwest,” “seprate,” and “bacomw”—also make parts of the description difficult to read. Aim for accurate process vocabulary and avoid repeating “sugar canes” when the material has become juice or syrup. Proofreading spelling and choosing standard collocations will make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect stages in longer sentences, but the response relies mainly on simple clauses joined by “then” and “after,” and these attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout, as in “these sugar canes are crushing” and “the juice are boiled.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also poorly controlled; for example, “then this is centrifuge” needs a clearer grammatical construction, and many sentences begin with lowercase letters or run together after full stops. These patterns sometimes make the process difficult to follow. Practise accurate passive forms for processes, such as “the cane is crushed,” and use shorter, correctly punctuated sentences before attempting more complex structures.

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