Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This cycle explains how sugar is produced from sugarcanes .In the very begining the sugar cane is grown by farmers in the field for almost 12 to 18 months .It is probably grown in hot weather after when they grow properly the sugarcanes are harvested by the farmers by two ways .one way is harvesting them by hands and other way is harvesting them with the help of machinery like trackters and other big vehicles. After harvesting sugarcanes are crushed in the machines called crushers for the purpose of extracting thier juice .After crushing and extraction of their juice the juice which were previosly extracted from sugar cane will be purified with the help of limestone filter in the filteration process the small impure particles are removed from the sugarcane juice the purified juice will now heated on a fire to boil. During boiling all the water evaporated from the juice and the syrup left within the pot after evaporation the juice converted into syrupwhen the syrup is formed it is now put into a centrifuge machine to seperate the sugar crystals from syrup after centrifugation the sugar is placed for drying and cooling and and in this way the sugarcane is converted into sugar .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response covers the main sequence from growing sugar cane through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. It also correctly notes the 12–18-month growing period and the two harvesting methods, so the process is recognisable. However, some details are added without support from the diagram, such as saying the crop is probably grown in hot weather, that farmers perform the harvesting, and that boiling removes all the water. The overview is also not clearly separated or stated: the final phrase says the cane is converted into sugar, but does not summarise the process as a whole. Focus on the stages and relationships shown, and avoid assumptions about conditions or outcomes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The stages are generally presented in the correct order, and sequencing phrases such as “After harvesting” and “After crushing” help the reader follow the process. However, the response is one long paragraph with few clear sentence boundaries, so the progression becomes difficult to track, particularly around the purification and evaporation stages. Several links are repetitive, including repeated uses of “after” and “the juice,” while the final “and and” is an obvious cohesion slip. Organise the report into a brief overview and a body describing the stages, and use full stops to separate each major step. This would make the sequence clearer without changing its content.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant process vocabulary, including “crushed,” “limestone filter,” “centrifuge,” “sugar crystals,” and “drying and cooling.” These terms show an attempt to describe the diagram specifically. However, the range is limited by repeated wording such as “juice,” “sugarcane,” and “after,” and several choices or spellings reduce precision: “trackters,” “thier,” “previosly,” “filteration,” and “seperate.” Some expressions are also awkward, for example “put into a centrifuge machine” and “the syrup left within the pot.” Use accurate process collocations and vary references where possible, such as “the extracted liquid” or “the resulting syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to connect stages using subordinate clauses and time expressions, but most of the response relies on long, loosely joined sentences. Errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation are frequent, as in “After crushing and extraction of their juice the juice which were previosly extracted…” and “the syrupwhen the syrup is formed.” Agreement and verb forms are also unreliable: “the juice which were” should be “the juice which was,” and “the purified juice will now heated” needs a passive form such as “is then heated.” These problems sometimes make relationships between actions unclear. Build shorter, complete sentences and check subject–verb agreement, passive constructions, and punctuation.

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