Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the overall manufacturing process of making refined sugar from the raw sugar cane from how it is harvested and crushed in machines to convert it to liqiud form.

Overall, the sugarcane firstly is grown for a long period of time. Afterwards it is harvested followed by its processing in the machinery and then in evaporator it becomes syrup. Lastly it is converted into refined sugar and it is ready to consume.

The first step of the whole process is growing the sugar cane in the open fields or yards for at least 12-18 months then comes their haversting which is perfomed by both human and machinery despite of being perfomed by only men. Secondly, it is collected at a place and soon it is crushed to its liquid form. Thirdly, it is purified by a lemon filter funnel.

Then it is passed from an evaporator chamber where it becomes syrup from juice by heating simultaneously. Fourthly, sugar is seperated from its syrup to form crystals which is held in a centrifuge. Lastly, it gets dried and cooled in a container and here it is ready to consumed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers the main stages and gives a clear overall summary: cane is grown, harvested, processed into syrup, separated into crystals, and finally dried and cooled. It also includes the growing period and both harvesting methods. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the diagram shows a limestone filter, not a “lemon filter,” and it does not specify that the cane is grown in “open fields or yards” or that the final sugar is “ready to consume.” The overview could also describe the process more precisely, including the key transformation from cane to juice and the separation of crystals from syrup. The main features are relevant, but some are less fully and accurately reported than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an overview followed by stages from growing through to drying and cooling. Paragraphing helps distinguish the summary from the detailed account, and signposts such as “Overall,” “Thirdly,” and “Lastly” make the order easy to follow. However, the numbering is not fully consistent: “Secondly” and “Thirdly” are followed by “Fourthly” only later, while some transitions do not clearly distinguish stages. Phrases such as “it is collected at a place” have an unclear reference, and “despite of being performed by only men” interrupts the process description and is confusing. More precise linking and reference would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses a reasonable range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “crushed,” “purified,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the stages. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, however: “lemon filter” misnames the limestone filter, “liquid form” is less exact than “juice,” and “held in a centrifuge” does not clearly express separation. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “liqiud,” “haversting,” “perfomed,” and “seperated.” These do not prevent understanding overall, but they reduce precision. Using accurate technical terms and checking spelling would strengthen the vocabulary control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the overview sentence beginning “Overall” and the clause “where it becomes syrup from juice by heating.” The sequence is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the sugarcane firstly is grown” has awkward adverb placement, while “then comes their haversting” has an unclear pronoun and faulty construction. In “it is ready to consumed,” the infinitive needs “be,” and “sugar is seperated … to form crystals which is held” has an agreement problem. The sentence beginning “The first step” also runs together several stages. More controlled sentence boundaries, agreement, and verb patterns would improve accuracy.

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