Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the procedure that how sugar is produced from sugar cane.Overall,production of sugar is done after following seven essential steps.

Initially,12-18 months period is required for the growth of sugar cane after it is sown.Then the harvesting can be done via two procedures-(i)by an electric tractor which is specifically designed for cutting the plants at a large number in single time and (ii) by manually i.e, farmers can cut them with the help of a sharp knife. In third step another machine is necessary for crushing the sugar canes so that the juice can be separated from the fibers.

After that ,the juice must be purified via a limestone filter and inserted into a evaporator .We need to heat up the evaporator so that the juice becomes syrup.

Later a centrifuge is used for separating the sugar crystals from the syrup.

Lastly cooling and drying the sugar crystals are ready as sugar we consume.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview identifies a seven-step process, and the account explains the key transformation from juice to syrup and then to sugar crystals. Some details are less fully reported: for example, the diagram shows juice passing through a limestone filter, but the description does not explain the filter’s role beyond purification, and the final stage is expressed unclearly. The added description of an “electric tractor” and a “sharp knife” is more specific than the diagram supports. A more precise overview and closer adherence to the labels would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The stages are presented in a logical sequence, and signposts such as “Initially,” “Then,” “After that,” “Later,” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the process. The response also separates the opening overview from the stage-by-stage account, giving it a coherent overall arrangement. However, the progression relies heavily on time markers, so connections between stages can feel mechanical. The harvesting methods are packed into one long sentence, while the final sentence does not clearly connect drying and cooling with the finished product. Paragraphing is limited, and spacing around punctuation is inconsistent. Grouping the stages into clearer paragraphs and varying the links—for example, using “Following filtration” or “Once the syrup is separated”—would improve cohesion and make the sequence easier to scan.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “purified,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals.” These terms show an adequate grasp of the subject, and the meaning is generally clear. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, however: “the procedure that how” is not a natural opening, “electric tractor” is not the label shown, and “at a large number in single time” is awkward. “Inserted into an evaporator” is also less suitable than language describing the juice being transferred or fed into it. Aim for accurate process collocations and avoid adding unsupported specifics. More precise verbs such as “extract,” “filter,” and “separate” would help describe the stages efficiently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is an attempt to use both simple and more complex structures, including a purpose clause in “so that the juice can be separated” and a result clause explaining that heating turns juice into syrup. The sequence remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. The opening phrase “the procedure that how” has an incorrect clause structure; “a 12–18 months period” would require a singular time expression; and “inserted into a evaporator” has an article error. The final sentence, “Lastly cooling and drying the sugar crystals are ready as sugar we consume,” is structurally unclear and lacks a well-formed main clause. Improve control of articles, clause construction, and sentence boundaries, especially when describing the final stage.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.