Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram provides information on the step by step production of sugar from sugarcane.

Overall, this process consists of seven steps in which sugar is produced. It involves the growing, harvesting and crushing of sugarcane then, juice of sugarcane was purified, evaporated, centrifuge and at the end drying and cooling of sugar.

At the initial stage, the growth of sugarcanes for about 12 to 18 months. Then, sugarcanes were harvested by manually or with the help of harvesting machine. At the third stage the crushing of sugarcanes were started and converted these into juice form then, purification of juice by using limestone filter.

In the next step, The filtered juice has converted into syrup by providing heat at the bottom of container to evaporate the water. Furthermore, centrifuge the syrup in which the sugar crystals separated from the syrup. At the end, allow the sugar crystals to let them dry and cool. Now, sugar is ready.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the full sequence and includes the key overview that production involves seven stages, from growing the cane to drying and cooling the sugar. It also accurately reports the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, the limestone filter, heating to form syrup, and separation of sugar crystals. This gives a clear account of the main features. Some details are less fully expressed: for example, the crushing stage is described as converting cane into juice, but the process could be explained more precisely as extracting juice from crushed cane. The final stage is reported, though the overview could better highlight the transformation from cane to crystals. More precise descriptions of each change would strengthen the account further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an introduction, an overview, and a chronological description of the stages. Sequencing phrases such as “At the initial stage,” “At the third stage,” and “At the end” help readers follow the process. The overall progression is clear, although some linking is mechanical and several stages are crowded into long sentences, particularly the description beginning “At the third stage.” The overview also lists stages in a way that is not fully parallel, which slightly interrupts the flow. To improve, give each group of related stages a clearer sentence or paragraph and use a wider range of natural links, while keeping the process order explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to describe the process, and relevant terms such as “limestone filter,” “syrup,” “sugar crystals,” and “evaporate” show some topic-specific range. However, several word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise, including “step by step production,” “juice form,” and “centrifuge the syrup.” The repeated use of “sugarcane” and “juice” also limits flexibility. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the stages, but they make the description less natural and precise. Aim to use standard process language, such as “the cane is crushed to extract juice” and “the syrup is spun in a centrifuge,” and check whether nouns or verbs are needed in each phrase.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, and the sequence remains understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “the growth of sugarcanes for about 12 to 18 months” is a sentence fragment, while “the crushing of sugarcanes were started” has an agreement problem. “The filtered juice has converted into syrup” also needs a passive form, such as “is converted,” and the final instruction-like phrase “allow the sugar crystals to let them dry and cool” is structurally awkward. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, despite the clear overall meaning. Practise accurate passive constructions and complete sentences, especially when describing stages in a process.

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