Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane,

Overall, the sugar is produced from sugar cane in 7 different process. First way is Growing 12 to 18 months sugar canes are producing through crops.Second process is harvesting, in this process high vehicles used and people also helped to cut out grass.

Furthermore, curshing is the process to produced suger canes can add in machine then juice will produced smoothly, then 4 process is purifying juice using limestone filter. In process 5 evaporator system is used to produced juice for heating method then last one is centrifuge method suger can be separte from syrup used crystals process then last is drying and cooling process used to separte suger for suger cae

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the process as having seven stages and include several relevant details, such as the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying. However, the account is incomplete and some descriptions are unclear or inaccurate: harvesting uses machinery or hand tools, not simply “high vehicles,” and the final stage is drying and cooling the sugar, rather than separating it. The overview is brief and does not clearly summarise the transformation from cane to juice, syrup, crystals, and finished sugar. The response also falls short of the required 150 words: it contains 115 words, with nine words copied from the prompt excluded. Develop the stages more fully and accurately to address the task more completely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows the general order of the process, and phrases such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “then” help signal progression. However, the organisation is limited: most stages are compressed into one long paragraph, so the reader has to work to distinguish the steps. The sequence also becomes confusing near the end, where “then last one is centrifuge” is followed by another “last” stage. Some links between ideas are mechanical, and punctuation does not consistently separate the stages. Use clear paragraphing, such as a short overview followed by a description of the stages, and connect each step with precise sequencing language so the progression is easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” “syrup,” and “crystals,” which shows awareness of the diagram’s terminology. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description difficult to understand, including “curshing,” “suger,” “separte,” and “grass” for sugar cane. Phrases such as “juice will produced smoothly” and “used crystals process” are also not natural descriptions of the stages. Aim to use accurate process verbs and collocations consistently—for example, say that cane is crushed to extract juice and that the centrifuge separates crystals from syrup. Proofreading spelling would also make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to describe a sequence using both simple statements and longer clauses, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent. Errors occur frequently in verb forms and sentence construction, as in “sugar canes are producing,” “juice will produced,” and “sugar can be separate.” Articles and plurals are also often missing or inaccurate, while the opening sentence ends with a comma rather than a full stop. These problems sometimes make it difficult to identify what happens at each stage. Practise forming clear passive sentences for process descriptions, such as “The cane is crushed” and “The juice is heated,” and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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