Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This diagram shows us the process of prepare sugar canes which is used to make the sugar .

It is represented us in the diagram the first process of prepare the sugar canes in 12 to 18 months .Then this process is complete after the process another process of harvesting is start by farmer or a heavy technology mechinery .

overall,the process of crushing is start in which the sugar canes crush in the form of juice

In the body part ,after the process of crushing then purifing juice in the limestone filter .then the next process of evaporator in this juice make in the form of syrup is starts .After sometime centrifuge in this process separates sugar in the form of crystals from the syrup . The nex and last process of this diagram drying the the sugar and cool after all the process sugarcanes became in the form of crystals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main stages, including growing, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying/cooling, and you correctly mention the 12–18-month growing period and the separation of crystals from syrup. However, the account is only partly clear and some details are inaccurate or incomplete. For example, the opening describes preparing sugar cane rather than producing sugar from it, and the final sentence says the sugar cane becomes crystals, whereas the process produces sugar crystals from the syrup. The overview is also not clearly presented: “overall” introduces crushing rather than summarising the process as a whole. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the complete sequence and describe the two harvesting methods and the role of each later stage more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response follows the process broadly from growing and harvesting through to the final stages, and words such as “then” and “after” help signal sequence. However, progression is not consistently clear because the paragraphing and linking are awkward. “Overall” appears before a detail about crushing, while “In the body part” does not create a useful transition. Several stages are joined in long, loosely connected sentences, making it difficult to see where one step ends and the next begins. The repeated use of “then” also makes cohesion mechanical. Organise the response into a short introduction and overview followed by a clearly sequenced description, using precise links such as “Next,” “Following this,” and “Finally” only where needed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals,” which helps communicate the stages. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For instance, “process of prepare sugar canes” does not express the production of sugar, and “heavy technology mechinery” is an unclear description of mechanical harvesting. “Purifing” and “nex” are misspelled, while “sugarcanes became in the form of crystals” uses an unsuitable expression for the final product. Aim for accurate process collocations and consistent spelling, such as “sugar cane is crushed” and “sugar crystals are dried and cooled.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe a sequence using clauses linked by “which,” “after,” and “then,” but sentence structures are limited and many are faulty. Examples include “the process of prepare sugar canes,” “harvesting is start,” and “the sugar canes crush in the form of juice”; these show problems with verb forms, passive constructions, and sentence structure. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “in the limestone filter” and the run-on transitions between stages. These errors sometimes make the process difficult to follow, although the intended sequence can usually be inferred. Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions—for example, “The cane is crushed to extract the juice”—and use shorter, complete sentences before attempting more complex links.

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