Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given diagrams illustrate the process of manufacturing sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the procedure consists of seven steps starting from growing sugar canes and ending on making sugar after going through several steps.

Turning to the details, in the first the step sugar canes are grown and it takes 12-18 months to grow sugar canes. After the sugar canes are fully grown, they are harvested and collected in a trolley. In the following step, the sugar canes are crushed to extract the sugar cane juice. After extraction process, the juice is filtered using a limestone filter. In the fifth step, the juice is boiled in a evaporator until the juice becomes syrup. After evaporation, the juice went through a process called centrifugation in a centrifuge machine. The machine seprates the sugar crystals from syrup. In the last step, the juice is dryed and cooled. After cooling, the end product is sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence from growing sugar cane to obtaining sugar, and accurately include the 12–18-month growing period, limestone filtration, evaporation into syrup, and separation of crystals in a centrifuge. The overview identifies the seven stages and the start and end points, which gives the reader a clear summary. However, some details are incomplete or imprecise: the diagram shows two harvesting methods, mechanical and manual, but these are not mentioned, and “collected in a trolley” is not supported by the visual. The final stage is drying and cooling the sugar crystals, rather than drying “the juice.” To strengthen the response, report these key features precisely and make the overview capture the transformation from cane to crystals and then finished sugar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible order, with an introduction, an overview, and a detailed account that follows the process from cultivation to the final product. Sequencing phrases such as “In the following step,” “In the fifth step,” and “In the last step” help the reader track the stages. This clear progression meets the lower-band expectations and shows some effective organisation. However, the repeated step-by-step transitions can feel mechanical, and “After extraction process” and “After evaporation” create a somewhat repetitive pattern. The opening of the detail paragraph, “in the first the step,” also interrupts the flow. Use a wider range of links and combine closely related stages where appropriate, while keeping the sequence easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “crushed,” “filtered,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifugation.” These terms help explain the stages, and the meaning is generally clear. There are also some attempts at more specific language, such as “extract” and “separates the sugar crystals from syrup.” However, several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “manufacturing” and “process” recur, “collected in a trolley” does not match the diagram, and “the juice was boiled” is less exact than describing it as heated or evaporated. Spelling errors in “seprates” and “dryed” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise process collocations and check spelling of technical terms and common past-tense forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mixture of simple sentences and some more developed structures, including “After the sugar canes are fully grown, they are harvested” and “until the juice becomes syrup.” The sequence is generally understandable, and errors rarely prevent the reader from following the process. Some grammatical inaccuracies remain, however. “In the first the step” has an unnecessary article and awkward word order; “in a evaporator” should use the correct article; and “After extraction process” needs an article or a different construction. Tense control also shifts in “the juice went through” after the surrounding present-tense description. Keep the present simple consistent for a process diagram, and proofread articles and sentence openings. More varied, accurately controlled complex sentences would improve the range.

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