Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given process chart illustrate the stage involved to manufacturing the sugar from sugarcane.

As per the given details,intially, the sugarcane take 12 to 18 monty grow up properly.Subsequently,the sugarcane is harvested by different method such hand using or with machine.Correspondingly,the sugarcane is send to factory to crushing it in the machine by which juice will be output.After this, the juice is filter by machine in which the juice is passes through the limestone filter.

After compelsation of some stage ,the juice is kept in container on the heater to evaporate it .Thus, the syrup will from juice.After that the syrup tranfer to centrifuge in which separates of sugar crystals from syrup.finally,the sugar is kept for cooling and for drying.

Overall,the key stage involved are harvesting,filter

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover the main sequence from growing and harvesting through crushing, filtering, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying/cooling, and you correctly include the 12–18-month growing period and both harvesting methods. However, the overview is incomplete: “the key stage involved are harvesting, filter” does not summarise the process as a whole or identify its start and end. Some stages are also described imprecisely, such as saying the juice is filtered “by machine” rather than explaining its passage through a limestone filter. The response is 126 words, below the required 150, which limits how fully you can report the important features. Add a concise overview and clarify how the syrup is separated into sugar crystals before the final drying and cooling stage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The stages are mostly presented in the correct order, and paragraphing separates the process description from an attempted overview. Sequencing expressions such as “Subsequently,” “After this,” and “finally” help the reader follow the production stages. However, the overview comes at the end and is unfinished, so the response does not have a clear, effective opening overview of the process. Some links are mechanical or unclear, including “After compelsation of some stage,” and the sentence about the centrifuge runs into the final stage without clear punctuation. Organise the response into an introduction and overview followed by a clearly sequenced description, and use transitions that accurately express each step.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use several relevant process terms, including “harvested,” “limestone filter,” “evaporate,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which help communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and some word choices or forms make the description difficult to understand. For example, “the stage involved to manufacturing” and “the syrup tranfer to centrifuge” are not natural expressions, while “filter by machine” is imprecise for this diagram. Spelling errors such as “intially,” “monty,” and “tranfer” also reduce clarity. Build a more accurate process vocabulary and check spelling; for instance, describe juice as being “passed through a limestone filter” and sugar crystals as being “separated from the syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine stages using time links and cause-and-effect structures, as in “After this” and “by which,” but most sentences contain errors in basic grammar, and complex attempts are often faulty. Examples include “the sugarcane take 12 to 18 monty grow up properly,” “the juice is filter,” and “the syrup will from juice.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “transfer to centrifuge” and the missing spaces after commas. Use a reliable present-simple pattern for each stage—for example, “The cane is crushed, and the juice is collected”—then check verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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