Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given figure shows the manufacturing process of sugar from sugarcane through 7 steps .

Process of sugar making starts from growing the sugarcanes , and ends with drying and cooling stage .There are two ways of harvesting , either by machine or through hand .

First step is where sugarcanes are grown on lands , later they are harvested once they are

12 to 18 months old .They can be harvested in two ways , those are through tractors or manually . After harvesting , they are gathered for crushing which is done through machine ,where the juice is extracted for further step .

This collected juice is purified using funnel with a limestone filter .Then the purified liquid is evaporated through evaporator , where required head is supplied at base , which turns juice to syrup (semi liquid) . Later the syrup is centrifuged , where it seperates sugar crystals from syrup , at last crystal sugar particles are dried and cooled .The dried crystals are the sugars we use everyday .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers the main sequence and gives a clear overview: sugar cane is grown, harvested by two methods, processed into juice, and ultimately dried and cooled. It also includes the 12–18-month growing period and explains the key transformation from juice to syrup and the separation of crystals. These details show a relevant understanding of the diagram. However, some stages are less fully or precisely described: the limestone filter is called a “funnel,” and the final product is described as “the sugars we use everyday,” which adds an unsupported claim. The overview could also summarise the process more precisely by noting that it begins with cultivation and ends with sugar crystals after centrifuging, drying and cooling. Overall, the task is addressed, though some details need clearer reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a generally logical order, and the paragraphing separates the overview from the detailed account. Sequencing expressions such as “First step,” “After harvesting,” “Then,” and “at last” help the reader follow the stages. The two harvesting methods are also introduced clearly near the beginning. However, some linking is mechanical or repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “Then” and “Later,” and the long final paragraph contains several stages that would be easier to follow if divided or connected more carefully. Punctuation spacing is inconsistent, and the opening sentence has an unnecessary space before the full stop. More varied, precise transitions and clearer sentence boundaries would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

There is an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “purified,” “evaporated,” “syrup,” and “centrifuged.” These terms help describe the stages and show some ability to use less common vocabulary. Meaning is generally clear, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural: “funnel” does not accurately name the limestone filter, “required head” appears to mean heat, and “the sugars we use everyday” is an awkward description of the final product. There are also spelling and form slips, such as “seperates,” “sugarcanes,” and “everyday” where “every day” is intended. Using more exact process terms and checking spelling and collocations would improve precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex forms, including a relative clause in “where the juice is extracted” and a passive construction in “are grown.” Most stages remain understandable despite some grammatical errors. Problems include inconsistent article use and sentence construction, as in “First step is where sugarcanes are grown on lands,” and an unclear clause in “where required head is supplied at base.” The opening also has a sentence fragment-like construction, “Process of sugar making starts,” without an article, while punctuation and spacing around commas and full stops are not consistently controlled. Aim for complete, well-formed sentences, use articles and prepositions more accurately, and proofread punctuation while retaining the range of structures attempted.

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