Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Sugar is the most important component of our diet. The diagram describes the process of making sugar using sugar cane.

Sugar cane takes about 12 to 18 months to grow after plantation of it. There after the harvesting from the feilds is done which can be carried out in two ways which are manual where in the farmer harvests the crop on his own, and the other method is using tractors. Using tractors increases the efficiency because in less amount of time farmers can harvest large quantity of crop. Further more the sugar cane is crushed using a machine to extract its juice which then passes through a filter which is composed of limestone to remove all the excess debris. After that the juice is boiled in high heat in an evaporator where the juice gets converted into syrup, which is transported into a centrifufe to separate crystalised sugar from the syrup which gets collected dried and cooled into a different container.

Overall we can say that production of sugar is quite tricky but is a crucial component of our meals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You describe the main sequence accurately, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. This gives the reader a clear account of how sugar is produced. However, the overview is not focused on the process: “production of sugar is quite tricky but is a crucial component of our meals” comments on its importance rather than summarising the main stages or transformation from cane to sugar. Some details are also less fully reported: the diagram shows sugar crystals being separated from syrup, but the final wording makes it unclear whether the syrup or crystals are dried and cooled. Avoid adding unsupported claims about tractor efficiency, and use the overview to highlight the process’s linear sequence and final product.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a generally logical progression, moving from cultivation through harvesting and processing to the final product. The sequence is easy to follow, and connectors such as “Further more” and “After that” help signal stages. The paragraphing also separates the introduction, process description, and closing comment. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some of the clearer progression associated with a stronger performance. However, the long middle paragraph contains many stages joined into one sentence, so the relationships between steps become crowded. “There after” and “Further more” are also awkwardly separated, and “which” references are not always clear. Use shorter sentences and paragraph the process into cultivation/harvesting and processing stages.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushed,” “extract its juice,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge.” These terms help communicate the stages, and “crystallised sugar” is an appropriate attempt at more specific wording. Some choices are inaccurate or informal for a process description: “plantation of it” is an awkward way to describe planting, “debris” is not stated in the diagram, and “tricky” is conversational and evaluative. There are also spelling errors in “feilds” and “centrifufe,” alongside the split forms “There after” and “Further more.” These do not prevent understanding, but greater precision and careful proofreading would strengthen the vocabulary control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex structures, for example “Sugar cane takes about 12 to 18 months to grow” and the clause beginning “which can be carried out in two ways.” The sequence is mostly understandable, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. “After plantation of it” has an unnatural noun phrase, while “where in the farmer harvests” has an unclear clause structure. In the final sentence, “which gets collected dried and cooled” lacks clear coordination and makes the subject of the actions uncertain. The long sentence beginning “Further more” also joins several stages without clear punctuation. Aim for more controlled sentence boundaries and make sure each pronoun and relative clause has an unmistakable referent.

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