Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided map illustrates the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The overall process consists of several stages, starting from growing sugar cane plant and ending with the help of human and machines to convert into sugar.

To begin with, the procedure of growing sugar canes plants takes 12 to 18 months become mature enough to harvest. After that, sugar canes plants harvesting by the support of humans and heavy vehicles.Following this, sugar canes then put into wheel shape machine to collect the juice that extract from the sugar cane plant.

After this has been done, the juice is purifying in the limestone filter to make it more clear and then, purifying juice is put in the steel tank on heat until the water extract and it become syrup.Subsequently, then the syrup pass through the centrifuge to separate sugar crystals from syrup. At the end, it leaves to cool down and wait for drying then it became sugar and ready to use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main sequence from cultivation through harvesting, processing and the final drying and cooling stage, and correctly include the 12–18-month growing period. Your overview identifies the start and end of the process, while details such as the limestone filter, heating and centrifuge show good coverage of the diagram. This meets the task well, with some features reported more fully than others: the two harvesting methods are mentioned generally as humans and heavy vehicles, rather than clearly identifying hand harvesting and mechanical harvesting. The description of evaporation is also slightly imprecise: the diagram shows juice becoming syrup, not explicitly water being extracted. To strengthen the response further, report these details precisely and make the overview capture the key transformation from cane to sugar crystals and the final drying stage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a sensible order, moving from growing to harvesting and then through the processing stages. Paragraphing separates the overview from the detailed account, and sequence markers such as “To begin with,” “After that,” and “At the end” help the reader follow the process. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because several transitions perform the same function, including “After this has been done” and “Subsequently, then.” Some links between clauses are also unclear, particularly in the final sentence, where “it leaves to cool down” does not clearly identify what “it” refers to. Use fewer, more varied transitions and make references explicit—for example, name the syrup or sugar crystals when describing the next stage.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “manufacturing process,” “limestone filter,” “centrifuge,” “sugar crystals,” and “syrup.” These terms help communicate the stages and show adequate vocabulary for describing a diagram. Some word choices and collocations are imprecise, however: “wheel shape machine” is not a natural description of the crusher, and “the water extract” does not clearly express evaporation. There is also repetition of “sugar canes plants” and “juice,” while “ready to use” adds little precision to the final stage. Aim for concise, conventional process language such as “crusher,” “the juice is filtered,” and “the syrup is heated until it thickens.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, using time clauses and sequencing structures such as “After that” and “until.” However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction are noticeable and sometimes make the process harder to follow. For example, “sugar canes plants harvesting” needs a passive construction, while “the syrup pass” requires subject–verb agreement and “it became sugar” should use a form consistent with the process description. Several sentences also lack necessary words or punctuation, as in “takes 12 to 18 months become mature enough to harvest” and the missing space after “vehicles.” Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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