Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrate how to prepared sugar from sugar cane.

Overall there are seven proccesing points that how sugar has been got ready from sugar cane, in the intial stage sugar has been grown in the field almost 12 to 18 months , in this time the sugar has been fully prepared in field which ready for harvesting either on machionary or by formers. In the third stage it has been crushed in converted to juicy form to perform this activity it has been purifying the juice from limestone filter to go through this stage it is enter to evaporator and this proccess the syrup got heated so it changed it shaped to syrup.

The sixth proccess shows it enter to the centrifuge so it can separate sugar crystal from the syrup while in the last stage the sugar is getting dring and put for colling , so in this way the sugar cane has been converted to the sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the process as a sequence and include several key stages: growing for 12–18 months, harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying/cooling. The overview also recognises that the cane is ultimately converted into sugar, so the response addresses the main purpose of the diagram. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: “the sugar has been fully prepared in field” suggests the sugar itself is ready before harvesting, and the evaporator is described as changing the juice into syrup without clearly stating that heat causes this change. The two harvesting methods are mentioned, but the later stages receive uneven explanation. To strengthen the report, describe each transformation precisely and distinguish the cane, juice, syrup, crystals, and final sugar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows the diagram’s general order, and phrases such as “In the third stage,” “The sixth process,” and “in the last stage” help the reader track the sequence. However, most of the information is packed into one long paragraph, with several stages joined by commas or loosely connected clauses. This makes the progression difficult to follow, particularly in the overview, where growing, harvesting, crushing, purification, and evaporation run together. Some links are also unclear, as in “to go through this stage it is enter to evaporator.” Use a separate overview and a clearly ordered process paragraph, and connect each stage with concise transitions such as “Next” and “After this.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystal,” which helps communicate the technical stages. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “processing points,” “got ready,” “juicy form,” and “put for colling.” Spelling errors, including “proccessing,” “machionary,” and “dring,” also reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise process verbs and standard forms: for example, say that cane is crushed to extract juice, the juice is purified, and the crystals are dried and cooled. This would make the description more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use passive forms, which are appropriate for describing a manufacturing process. However, these structures are often faulty, and the reader has to work through errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. Examples include “The diagram illustrate,” “how to prepared,” and “it is enter to evaporator.” The long sentence beginning “Overall there are seven…” also combines several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries. Use a reliable pattern such as “The cane is harvested and then crushed,” and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms. Breaking complex sentences into shorter, complete statements would improve accuracy while retaining some variety.

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