Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The process diagram illustrates the manufacturing process for producing sugar from sugar canes in 7 steps.

Overall, there are total 7 steps which take place while manufacturing sugar from sugar canes, these steps commence from growing sugar canes which takes 12 to 18 months and terminate at drying and cooling sugar.

The process of manufacturing of sugar begins from growing of sugar canes in the fields which take 12 to 18 months to get ready for second step which is harvesting, harvesting cane be done by two methods either by machines or by hands. The third step is crushing sugar canes into juice followed by fourth step which is purifying juice by using limestone filter.

In the fifth step evaporator, syrup is produced from juice by heating juice in a bowl and then sugar crystal separated from syrup in the sixth step which name is centrifuge followed by the last step in which the sugar come in its final shape and ready to transported into markets, in this last step dying and cooling of sugar take place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the full sequence and give a clear overview that the process starts with cane growing and ends with drying and cooling. The 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation and centrifuging are all relevant details, so the main stages are accurately represented. This is a solid account of the task, with the overview and stage descriptions showing good coverage. To make the account more complete and precise, describe the final separation as sugar crystals being separated from syrup, then dried and cooled. The claim that the sugar is “ready to transported into markets” is not shown in the diagram, so avoid adding an unsupported destination. A more concise overview could also highlight the transformation from cane to juice, syrup and crystals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible order: an introduction and overview are followed by descriptions of the early and later stages. Sequencing expressions such as “The third step,” “In the fifth step” and “followed by” help the reader track the process. The overall progression is clear, although the repeated use of numbered stages makes the account somewhat mechanical, and the final sentence carries several stages and details at once. Some links are also awkward, as in “followed by fourth step,” which interrupts the flow. For stronger cohesion, group related stages into clearer sentences and use varied transitions such as “After filtration” or “Once the juice has become syrup.” Keep each sentence focused on one or two connected stages.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “manufacturing,” “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator” and “centrifuge.” These terms make the stages understandable and show some task-specific vocabulary. However, several choices or forms are imprecise: “harvesting cane be done” appears to mean “harvesting can be done,” “the sugar come in its final shape” is not a natural description of the final stage, and “dying” is a spelling error for “drying.” Phrases such as “manufacturing of sugar” and “by hands” are also less natural than “sugar production” and “by hand.” Aim for precise process collocations and check spelling, especially where a small error changes the meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview sentence and the sequence joined with “followed by.” The meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur and make parts less smooth. For example, “there are total 7 steps” needs an article or a different construction, while “which take 12 to 18 months” has a subject–verb agreement problem when referring to the growing stage. In “the sugar come in its final shape,” the verb does not agree with its subject, and “ready to transported” is missing “be.” Several long sentences also combine multiple stages without clear punctuation. Use shorter, controlled sentences and check articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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