Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram provides information about the manufacturing process for producing sugar from sugar cane.

In the first step, sugar canes are planted and let them grow for 12 to 18 months.After that, sugar cane are harvested in the harvesting season. Moreover, farmers and havesting machines are taken part in this process , then the sugar cane send for crushing in the crushing machines and it seperated the juice from the sugar canes.In fourth step, juice of sugar cane are sent for purification and then it filteres the limestone.There comes the process of evaporation where juice becomes syrup and then it put on the fire for further heat. Centrifuge which seperates the sugar crystals from syrup are taken place in sixth step .

Finally, sugar is sent for drying and cooling in the nbig container.

Overall, production for making sugar cane starts from growth and ends on drying and cooling.Missing of any step may halt the whole diagram .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview also identifies the process’s beginning and end. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the diagram shows harvesting by either a machine or by hand, rather than specifically by “farmers and harvesting machines,” and the limestone is a filter used to purify the juice, not something the juice itself filters. The explanation of centrifuging is also incomplete, as this stage separates sugar crystals from syrup. The final comment that missing a step may halt production is not a useful feature of the diagram. Clarifying these points and describing the separation more fully would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The stages are presented in a generally logical sequence, and signposts such as “In the first step,” “After that,” “In fourth step,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process. This gives the response a coherent overall arrangement. However, nearly all the information is placed in one paragraph, and several transitions feel mechanical or awkward, particularly “There comes the process of evaporation.” The overview is separated at the end, but it repeats the sequence rather than summarising the process more effectively. The final sentence about a missing step also interrupts the description. Use a clear paragraph for the overview and another for the stages, and connect related steps with more natural transitions to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “manufacturing process,” “crushing,” “purification,” “evaporation,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” so the reader can identify the main operations. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “sugar cane are harvested in the harvesting season,” “it filteres the limestone,” and “are taken place.” There are also spelling errors, including “havesting,” “seperated,” “filteres,” and “nbig,” which reduce precision. Aim to use standard process descriptions and check spelling carefully. For example, say that the juice “passes through a limestone filter” and that the centrifuge “separates sugar crystals from the remaining syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe a sequence using both simple statements and linked clauses, and the meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical control is limited, especially with agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. Examples include “sugar cane are harvested,” “then the sugar cane send for crushing,” and “Centrifuge … are taken place.” The opening instruction “sugar canes are planted and let them grow” also shifts awkwardly between passive and active forms. Some sentences run together without appropriate spacing or punctuation, as in the transition after “months.” Use consistent present simple passive forms for a process—for example, “The cane is harvested and then crushed”—and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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