Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given diagram illustrates the process of making sugar from sugar cane. Noticeably, the process of making sugar from sugar can not only complex but also systematic.

To begin with, sugar canes are grown in farms and it requied 12 to 18 months for fully grown sugar canes. After that, grown sugar canes harvested either by poeple by hand or a harvesting machine. Then, the sugar canes are crushed into machine for juice. after that, juice transferred into limestone filter for purifying juice.

In the next step, purified juice goes into evaporator in which some part evaporated and juice becomes syrup. Then, the syrup transferred into centrifuge machine where sugar crystals seperates from syrup. In the final stage, sugar crystals are dried and cooled and the finally sugar is ready for use.

Overall, the process of sugar making undergone through 7 steps which starts with harvesting fully grown sugar canes and ends with dried and cooled sugar for consumer use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The overview also identifies the seven-stage process and its endpoint. This gives the response a clear account of the diagram. However, some details are less fully reported: for example, the evaporator uses heat, and the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup; these could be described more precisely. The overview says the process starts with “harvesting fully grown sugar canes,” although growing is the first stage. To strengthen the response, make the overview accurately capture the full start-to-finish sequence and include the key inputs or outputs where shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the stages. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “After that,” and “In the next step” help the reader follow the process, and the stages are generally grouped logically. This is a coherent overall arrangement. Some linking is mechanical and repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “After that” and “Then.” There is also a full stop followed by lowercase “after that,” which interrupts the flow, and the final overview repeats information already given without clearly correcting its inaccurate starting point. Use a wider range of natural transitions and ensure each paragraph has a distinct purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” so the stages remain understandable. Some attempts at more specific wording are useful, but several choices or spellings are inaccurate: “sugar can” for sugar cane, “poeple,” “seperates,” and “the finally sugar.” Phrases such as “crushed into machine for juice” and “some part evaporated” are also imprecise or unnatural. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the process, but they limit precision and naturalness. Check spelling carefully and learn common process collocations, such as “crushed to extract juice” and “the remaining syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause “in which some part evaporated” and the passive construction “are grown.” The sequence is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the process … can not only complex” is missing a verb, while “it requied 12 to 18 months” needs a correctly formed verb and a clearer subject. Passive forms are also inconsistent: “grown sugar canes harvested” and “juice transferred” need auxiliary verbs, and “sugar crystals seperates” has a subject–verb agreement problem. Capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent. Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions and check each sentence for a complete verb phrase and agreement.

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