Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pictures illustrate the whole process from sughar canes to fine sughar that we use on daily basis.

Overall, sugar canes cultivation take 12 to 18 month for full growth which after harvested pass through the crushing process. In this process juice extracted. Then it is filtered and heated. When it become cool, then it is becom sugar.

Initially sugar canes are cultivated that take 12 to 18 month for complete growh. These canes are then cultivated by different ways either by farmer or by harverster. These are send to the machines for crusing process where juice is extracted from them. That juice passes from limestone filter that purify the juice. That purified liquid is heated to seprate heavy and light weight liquid. High density liquid set down which pass through centrifuge that seprate crystals from high density liquid. This crystal we use on daily basis as the sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the process as a sequence from growing sugar cane to producing sugar, and include the 12–18-month growing period, two harvesting methods, crushing, filtering, heating and centrifuging. This gives the reader a relevant account of several key stages. However, the overview is not fully accurate: “When it become cool, then it is becom sugar” suggests cooling directly creates the sugar, whereas the diagram shows centrifuging separates sugar crystals from syrup, followed by drying and cooling. The description also misstates the separation as involving “high density” and “light weight” liquids, which the diagram does not specify, and omits the final drying-and-cooling stage as a distinct step. A more precise overview and accurate account of the later stages would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing the stages in more detail. Sequencing words such as “Initially,” “then” and “where” help show that the process moves forward. However, progression is weakened by repetition: the growing period and harvesting are described in both the overview and the final paragraph, while the stages after heating are not clearly ordered. Some links are also awkward or unclear, particularly “When it become cool, then it is becom sugar” and “which pass through centrifuge.” Use one concise overview, then describe each stage once in sequence, with clear references to the juice, syrup and crystals. This would make the organisation easier to follow and reduce mechanical linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “cultivated,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “purify” and “centrifuge,” so the reader can identify many stages. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general words such as “process,” “juice” and “sugar,” as well as inaccurate or unsuitable choices. “Cultivated” is used for harvesting, and “high density liquid” is not a precise description of the syrup or the centrifuge’s output. Spelling errors such as “sughar,” “harverster,” “crusing” and “seprate” are noticeable and sometimes distract from the meaning. Aim for accurate process terms and check spelling; for example, distinguish cane, juice, syrup and sugar crystals rather than referring to them broadly as “liquid.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses with “which” and “where,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur in verb forms and agreement: “cultivation take,” “it become cool,” and “These are send” should use correctly formed verbs. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in phrases such as “passes from limestone filter” and “pass through centrifuge.” The sentence “High density liquid set down which pass through centrifuge” is difficult to follow because the subject and clause relationships are unclear. These recurring errors sometimes make the process harder to understand, despite the overall meaning being recoverable. Practise accurate present-simple passive forms for process descriptions, and build shorter, clearly structured sentences before adding subordinate clauses.

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