Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Given diagram shows the manfucaturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. The whole process is given in numbers from growing sugar canes to harvesting and converting into sugar.

The process start with growing sugar canes which take 12 to 18 months then in the second part harvesting start with different machines or human labour. Third part is crushing in which sugar canes insert into one side of crusher and it extract juice from them. After extracting the juice it moved to forth part in which juice is filtered using limestone filter and purified the juice. In the 5th part juice moved to a boiler and heated with flame which convert it to syrup. The 6th part is centrifuge in this process sugar crsytals seperated from syrup. The 7th process is the last process which is drying and cooling. Sugar crystals are dried and cooled which shape it to the actual suger we use on daily basis.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, including the growing period of 12–18 months, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. You also identify the key separation of sugar crystals from syrup. However, the opening does not provide a clear overview of the process as a whole; it mainly repeats that the stages are numbered. Some details are imprecise or unsupported: the diagram shows heat beneath an evaporator, not specifically a boiler or flame, and the final stage is described as shaping sugar into the product used daily, which is not shown. To strengthen the response, add a concise overview of the linear process and report only what the diagram depicts, including the two harvesting methods.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The stages are presented in a logical sequence, and time and sequence markers such as “then,” “Third part,” and “The 6th part” help the reader follow the process. This gives the response a coherent overall arrangement. However, it is written as one continuous paragraph, so the introduction and process description are not clearly separated. The repeated numbered transitions also make the progression somewhat mechanical, while references such as “it” in “it extract juice” and “it moved” are not always clear. Use a brief overview followed by a clearly organised description, and vary the links between stages—for example, “Once harvested” or “The resulting juice is then…”—to improve flow and clarity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “crusher,” “limestone filter,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals,” which makes the stages recognisable. However, the range is limited and some wording is inaccurate or awkward for a process description. “Different machines or human labour” is less precise than naming mechanical and manual harvesting, while “boiler” and “flame” add details not shown in the diagram. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “manfucaturing,” “crsytals,” “seperated,” and “suger.” Choose precise process terms, check spelling carefully, and avoid informal or unsupported phrases such as “the actual sugar we use on daily basis.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates the sequence using both simple sentences and some subordinate clauses, such as “which take 12 to 18 months” and “in which sugar canes insert into one side of crusher.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and several errors make the sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “The process start” needs subject–verb agreement, “sugar canes insert” needs a passive construction, and “it extract juice” has an agreement error. The sentence beginning “After extracting the juice it moved…” also lacks a clear grammatical subject and has an incorrect verb form. Practise passive forms for processes (“the cane is crushed”) and check agreement, articles, and tense in each sentence.

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