Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the process of making sugar from sugar cane. Commencing from growing and ending at drying and cooling.

Looking at the details, the process started from growing the sugar canes. It takes 12-18 months to grow after then it has been harvested by hands and by machine. Thereafter, the crops go for the crushing; where sugar cane coverted into liquid form (juice). Furthermore, juice is move into the limestone filter where purifying the juice and kill all germs. Then it moves to the next step, where the juice is boiled in evaporator and transformed into syrup. Moving next, the centrifuge process is a very important step where the sugar cyrstals separate from the syrup. After that the sugar cyrstals move to the drying and cooling section, after drying and cooling, it distribute in the markets.

Overall, The whole process consists of seven steps. Starting from harvesting and then crushing trasform into juice after that purifying the juice. Moreover, in evaporator; juice transfer into syrup and then centrifuge the syrup make into sugar cyrstals. Thereafter, it dry and cool before distribution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main sequence and include the useful detail that cane takes 12–18 months to grow and can be harvested by hand or machine. The account also correctly describes crushing, filtering, evaporation and centrifuging, so the key stages are recognisable. Your overview, however, is repeated and does not clearly summarise the process as a whole: the first sentence gives its endpoints, while the final paragraph lists stages again. Some details are unsupported or inaccurate, especially that the limestone filter “kill[s] all germs” and that the finished sugar is distributed to markets. To strengthen the response, give one concise overview of the seven-stage process and report only what the diagram shows, including drying and cooling as the final stage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, a detailed account and a concluding overview, and the stages are generally presented in the correct order. Connectors such as “Thereafter,” “Furthermore” and “After that” help the reader follow the sequence. However, the final paragraph largely repeats information from the body rather than adding a distinct overview, and the opening fragment, “Commencing from growing and ending at drying and cooling,” is not smoothly connected to the first sentence. Some links are mechanical, while the relationship between steps is occasionally unclear. Organise the response into a clear introduction and overview followed by a single chronological description, and use concise transitions or stage references rather than repeating the sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup” and “centrifuge.” These terms make the production stages understandable, and “transformed into syrup” is an effective description. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal, however: “crops go for the crushing,” “juice is move,” and “distribute in the markets” do not express the process naturally. There are also spelling errors in “coverted” and “cyrstals,” and “kill all germs” adds an unsupported claim. Aim for precise process language such as “the cane is crushed,” “the juice passes through a filter,” and “the crystals are separated.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including sequencing clauses such as “where the juice is boiled in evaporator and transformed into syrup.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to limit accuracy. For example, “juice is move” needs a passive form (“the juice is moved”), while “it distribute” needs subject–verb agreement and a suitable passive construction. “Commencing from growing and ending at drying and cooling” is a fragment, and “after then it has been harvested” combines tenses awkwardly. Practise consistent present-simple passive forms for process descriptions, and check each sentence for a complete clause, correct articles and agreement.

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