Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE PICTURE ILLUSTRATES HOW SUGAR MANUFACTURED BY SUGAR CANES. THE WHOLE PROCESS MAINLY DIVIDED IN SEVEN STAGES. PROCESS BEGIN WHIT GROWING SUGAR CANES AND IT ENDS WITH PROCESS OF DRYING AND COOLIN SUGAR FOR CONSUMERS.

FIRSTLY, THE PROCESS GROWING SUGAR CANES TAKE ALMOST 12 TO 18 MONTHS AFTER THAT IT CONTINUED WITH HARVESTING. HARVESTING HAVE TWO METHODS, FIRST ONE IS THROUGH MACHINE AND SECONDLY SUGAR CANES HARVESTED BY HUMAN. NEXT STEP IS CRUSHIN THE SUGAR CANES INTO MACHINE TO MAKE JUICE OUT OF CANES AND THAN JUICE PURIFIED IN LIMESTONE FILTER.

SECONDLY, THE PURIFIED JUICE GOSE TO EVAPORATOR MACHINE AND IT EVAPORATE THE JUICE WITH THE HELP OF HEAT. LATER THAN, THE SUGAR CANE SYRUP CAN SAPERATED FROM CEYSTALS BY THE CENTRIFUGE. MOREOVER, IT ENDS WITH DRYING AND COOLING SUGAR WITH THE HELP OF SUN AND AIR. IT CONCLUSION AFTER THIS ALL PROCESS DELICIOUS AND PURE SUGAR IS READY FOR CONSUMPTION.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation and centrifuging to drying and cooling. The overview also identifies the process’s beginning and end, and you mention both harvesting methods. These details show a solid understanding of the diagram. However, the final stage is inaccurately described: the diagram shows drying and cooling but does not specify that this happens “with the help of sun and air.” The claim that the sugar is “delicious and pure” is also not supported by the visual. To strengthen the response further, keep the account strictly factual and explain more precisely that centrifuging separates sugar crystals from syrup.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall sequence and is divided into an opening overview followed by stages of the process. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Next step,” and “Later than” help signal progression, so the reader can follow the production stages. However, the organisation becomes somewhat mechanical: “Secondly” introduces a later stage even though the process has already been described in sequence, and “Moreover” does not express a clear relationship between the centrifuge and the final stage. Some links between sentences are also abrupt. Use fewer, more precise transitions and group the stages into logical paragraphs—for example, cultivation and extraction, then processing and finishing—to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which allows you to describe the diagram’s main equipment and stages. There is also some attempt to vary wording, such as “purified” and “separated.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “crushin,” “goese,” “saperated,” and “ceystals,” and some phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “harvesting by human” and “sugar cane syrup.” These errors sometimes make the description less clear. Check spelling carefully and choose standard process collocations, such as “harvested by hand” and “sugar crystals are separated from the syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the sequence is generally understandable. However, grammatical control is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. Examples include missing or incorrect verb forms in “how sugar manufactured” and “the process growing,” subject–verb agreement in “the process … take,” and tense or clause problems in “it continued with harvesting.” Articles and sentence construction also need attention, as in “into machine” and “it conclusion after this all process.” Practise forming accurate passive sentences for process descriptions, such as “The cane is crushed” and “The juice is then heated.” Check each sentence for a complete subject and verb, correct agreement, and appropriate articles.

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