Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrate how sugar is produced from sugar can

Overall, It can clearly be seen that they are few steps to making suger cane .

Firstly,the proces starting with growing stage it will take 12-18 month.After that sugar can heversting by two process either and manually and it will pass to the crushing madhine to make juice while,the juice move to the purifying juice.

Finally the juice becomes syrup it heated by evaporator Next it send to the centrifuge to separate sugar crystals from syrup finall process of sugar cane is drying and cooling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the process as sugar production and include several key stages: growing for 12–18 months, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. However, the account is brief and only partially develops the diagram. The harvesting methods are not clearly described, and the limestone filter and the role of heat in turning juice into syrup are omitted. The overview, “there are few steps,” is vague and does not summarise the process’s main progression from cane to sugar. The response also falls 55 words short of the required minimum, which limits the detail you can provide. To improve, give a clear overview and explain each stage accurately, including the separation of crystals from syrup.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows the general order of the process, using “Firstly,” “After that,” and “Finally” to guide the reader from growing to the final drying and cooling stage. This gives it some basic organisation. However, the stages are compressed into a small number of long, loosely connected sentences, and the progression is not always easy to follow. For example, “while,the juice move to the purifying juice” joins steps without clear punctuation or a precise link. The final sentence also runs several stages together. Use separate sentences or paragraphs for the initial stages and the later processing, and apply sequence markers consistently. Clearer links between each stage would make the process easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “juice,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals,” so the reader can recognise the topic and several stages. However, the range is limited, and spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable: “suger,” “heversting,” and “madhine” make parts of the description harder to read. Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “few steps to making suger cane,” which does not clearly describe the production process. Aim to use accurate terms from the diagram and vary verbs such as “passes,” “is filtered,” and “is heated.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural process collocations would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect stages in longer sentences, but the response relies on a limited range of structures, and errors are frequent enough to affect clarity. The opening, “The diagram illustrate,” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the proces starting with growing stage” lacks a correctly formed verb and article. Tense and passive forms are also problematic in “sugar can heversting” and “it heated by evaporator.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention: “Finally the juice becomes syrup it heated by evaporator Next it send” contains several clauses without clear separation. Practise describing processes with consistent present simple passive forms, for example, “The cane is harvested” and “The juice is heated.”

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