Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

let check how sugar is produced from sugar cane in 1st step sugar canes are growing in 12-18 month when it is ready for harvesting in two types some people cut sugar cane manually and some people prefer harvesting with machines then it came to next third stage it is process of crushing with machines in it sugar cane insert from one side motor drop in the form of juice in next step purifing juice with limesstones filter then it move into evaporator in this heat gives to juice then juice coverted into syrup next 6th stage in this method sugar crystals separates from syrup this process is known as centrifuge last satage of all this process it is method of drying and cooling then at last sugar is ready for use we can use it for our daily uses

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, two harvesting methods, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. You also correctly explain that heating turns the juice into syrup and that the centrifuge separates crystals from syrup. However, the response is below the required 150 words: 142 words, with 10 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. The overview is not clearly separated from the stage-by-stage account, and some details are unclear or inaccurate, such as “motor drop in the form of juice.” The final comment about sugar being ready for daily use adds little to the process summary. Develop a concise overview and describe each stage more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The stages are generally presented in the correct sequence, and words such as “then,” “next,” and “last” help the reader follow the process. This gives the response some organisation. However, nearly all the information is placed in one long sentence, so the progression is difficult to follow and the links between stages feel mechanical. The opening repeats the task statement rather than providing an overview, and there is no paragraphing to distinguish the overall process from its details. Break the response into clear paragraphs and use complete sentences for each group of stages. More precise links, such as “After purification” and “In the final stage,” would make the sequence easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use several relevant process terms, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which show an appropriate attempt to describe the diagram. Some vocabulary is imprecise or incorrectly formed, however, and this sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “motor drop in the form of juice” does not clearly describe juice flowing from the crusher, while “limesstones filter” and “purifing” contain spelling errors. Phrases such as “ready for use” and “daily uses” are repetitive and not especially useful in a process report. Aim for accurate collocations and technical descriptions, such as “the juice flows out” and “a limestone filter,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect several stages using clauses, for example, “when it is ready for harvesting” and “then juice converted into syrup.” However, most of the account relies on a long run-on sentence, and the limited sentence variety makes relationships between ideas hard to interpret. There are frequent problems with verb forms and sentence construction: “sugar canes are growing” would be clearer as “sugar cane grows,” and “sugar crystals separates” needs a plural verb. Missing articles and punctuation also affect clarity, as in “in next step purifing juice.” Use a consistent present simple for process descriptions, add full stops between stages, and check subject–verb agreement and articles.

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