Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the process in which sugar is produced from sugar canes.

Overall, the process consists of seven sequential steps, commencing with plantation of sugar canes and culminating with drying and cooling the sugar syrup. This process includes three main stages, agricultural, machenical and chemical.

To initiat with, sugar canes are planted, after then once they fully grown up, which takes up to 12-18 months, they are being harvested through by hand or using machine. Subsequently, after being harvested, it goes for crusing, in which juice is derived from sugar canes, and using limestone filter this juice is fitered. Consequently, purified juice goes for evaporation, in which it goes through intense heat in order to convert juice into syrup.

In the next stage, sugar crystals are separated from syrup, using centrifuge machine. Finally, purified syrup stored in container for drying and cooling. once its become dry, it is transformed into fine sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main sequence and provide an overview, noting seven steps from planting to drying and cooling. The stated growing period and both harvesting methods are accurate, and you describe crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation and centrifuging. This gives the reader a sound account of the process. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the final product is sugar, not “sugar syrup,” and the diagram shows sugar crystals separated from syrup before the sugar is dried and cooled, rather than purified syrup being stored and transformed into fine sugar. The overview’s division into “agricultural, machenical and chemical” stages is not clearly supported or explained. More precise reporting of the final stages and a clearer overview would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs describing the stages. Sequencing expressions such as “Subsequently,” “Consequently” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process. The overall progression is clear, although some links are mechanical or awkward: “after then once” and “after being harvested” make the opening sequence harder to read. The shift to “In the next stage” is understandable but does not clearly connect the centrifuge stage to the preceding evaporation. There is also some unclear referencing in “it goes for crushing,” where the pronoun does not clearly identify the cane. Use fewer stacked transitions and make each stage-to-stage link explicit to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “limestone filter,” “evaporation,” “syrup” and “centrifuge,” which allows you to describe the main operations. Some less common terms are attempted, but spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “machenical,” “crusing” and “fitered” are misspelled, while “plantation” is not the natural term for the act of planting. A few combinations are also imprecise, such as “intense heat” and “fine sugar”; the diagram simply indicates heat and the final product as sugar. These issues do not prevent understanding, but careful proofreading and more exact process collocations would strengthen the description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex forms, including a relative clause in “which takes up to 12-18 months” and a purpose clause with “in order to convert.” The sequence remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in verb forms, sentence construction and articles. For example, “after then once they fully grown up” lacks a correctly formed clause, and “they are being harvested” is an awkward passive construction for a general process. In “Finally, purified syrup stored in container,” the passive verb and article are missing; “once its become” also needs a correctly formed subject and verb. Aim for consistent present simple passive forms, such as “the juice is filtered,” and check sentence boundaries and punctuation.

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