Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the diagram demonstrates the production technique of sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, grown sugar canes harvest and then passed through the different processes in which crushing to purifying and so on. At last, drying and cooling methods are used to make sugar.

Firstly, sugar canes should grown approximately a year or upto 18 months. These growing sugar canes harvests by machines or human beings.Then transfer into crushing machines which extract sugar cane juice.

the next step is to use the limestone filter to purifying the Juice from particles.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the subject and report several accurate early stages: cane growing, harvesting by machine or by hand, crushing, and filtering through limestone. However, the response addresses the process only partially. It stops after purification and omits the later stages—heating the juice into syrup, separating sugar crystals in a centrifuge, and drying and cooling the sugar—so the process is not summarised from beginning to end. The overview is also vague: “different processes” does not explain the main transformation from cane to sugar. The response is 88 words, below the required 150, which leaves too little space to cover the key stages. To improve, give a clear overview and describe every stage in sequence, including the final product.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sense of sequence, using “Overall,” “Firstly,” and “the next step” to guide the reader through the stages. The opening overview and the following description also provide some paragraph organisation. However, progression is incomplete because the account ends at purification, and the links between stages are sometimes awkward: “These growing sugar canes harvests by machines or human beings.Then transfer” does not clearly connect the actions or identify what is transferred. Capitalisation and spacing, such as the lowercase “the” after a full stop and the missing space after “beings.”, also interrupt the flow. Use a consistent paragraph structure and clear sequencing phrases, then connect each stage explicitly through to drying and cooling.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use several relevant process terms, including “crushing machines,” “limestone filter,” and “juice,” which help communicate the topic. The vocabulary is nevertheless limited and some choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “production technique,” “different processes,” and “human beings.” “Harvests” is also used where the process requires a passive verb, and “purifying the Juice from particles” is not a natural description of filtration. These choices make parts of the account less clear, while the short response offers little evidence of a wider range. Aim for precise process vocabulary and natural collocations, for example, “production process,” “harvested by machinery or by hand,” and “the juice is filtered to remove impurities.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both an overview and longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Several verb forms are incorrect or missing: “sugar canes harvest” should be passive, “should grown” needs a past participle, and “These growing sugar canes harvests” has problems with both the verb and sentence structure. “Then transfer into crushing machines” also lacks a clear subject and a correctly formed verb. The response relies mainly on simple clauses, with limited accurate complex structure. Punctuation and sentence beginnings need attention, including the lowercase “the” after a full stop. Practise passive forms for process descriptions—such as “the canes are harvested” and “the juice is heated”—and check each sentence for a subject, verb, and consistent tense.

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