Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, This process contained seven steps for preparing sugar. It starts from fully matured sugar canes and ends with sugar in crystals form. In this process it included manual labour and modern machinery.

In detail, the sugar canes is required 12-18 months for growing and becoming fully matured. After this, they harvested by manually or the help of modern machinery, which is less time taking. They crushed sugar canes in machine for squizing sugar juice. However, the juice is purifying with the help of limestone filter.

Moving to the next stage, They heated the juice with the help of evaporator and make a syrup. When syrup is fully consist in thick form, it moved to the next stage. In further step, the centrifuge is used for separates sugar crystals from syrup. Finally, The sugar is ready for sale, after drayed and cooled.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main sequence and provide a clear overview: the process has seven stages, begins with cane growing and ends with dried and cooled sugar, and uses both manual and mechanical harvesting. The details about the 12–18-month growing period, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation and centrifuging are grounded in the diagram. This gives the response a solid account of the process. Some details are less fully or precisely reported, however: the final product is described as “ready for sale,” which the diagram does not state, and the overview’s “sugar in crystals form” is imprecise because crystals are separated before the final drying and cooling stage. To strengthen the response, describe the output of each stage accurately and avoid adding information not shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible order, with an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs that follow the process from growing through to the final stage. Sequencing phrases such as “After this,” “Moving to the next stage,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the stages. This is a coherent overall arrangement. Some links are mechanical or unclear, though: “When syrup is fully consist in thick form” interrupts the progression and does not clearly explain the transition, while “In further step” is an awkward link. Capitalising “This” and “They” after commas also disrupts the flow. Use a smaller range of precise transitions and connect each stage directly to its result to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “crushed,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup” and “centrifuge.” These terms make the stages recognisable, and the meaning is generally clear despite some inaccurate choices. Several collocations and word forms are not natural: “manufacturing for making,” “less time taking,” “squizing,” “fully consist in thick form” and “drayed” weaken precision. “Sugar in crystals form” is also an awkward expression. Aim for concise, standard process language, such as “sugar production,” “more time-efficient,” “thickens into syrup” and “dried and cooled.” Check spelling and use the diagram’s terminology consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a sequence of clauses linked with “After this” and “When.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but errors in agreement, tense, articles and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “the sugar canes is required” should use a plural verb and a more suitable construction; “they harvested” needs a passive form, and “the juice is purifying” should be “is purified.” In “the centrifuge is used for separates,” the verb pattern is incorrect. Capital letters after commas in “Overall, This” and “Finally, The” are also inaccurate. Practise consistent passive forms for process descriptions and check subject–verb agreement and verb patterns.

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