Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The sequential steps in manufacturing of sugar from sugar cane are described below.

Overall, A seven step process take more than a year to make sugar. The pre-production stage involve the cultivation and harvest of crop. At Manufacturing stage purification and processing of juice will take place.

In production stage, sugar cane is grown for twelve to eighteen months. Crop is harvested in two ways by machine and manual. After they are allowed for manufacturing process. Crushing is the first step in it and it involves in crushing the sugar canes to produce juice. Obtained juice is purified with the help of cone having limestone filter in it.

Later, juice is heated in evaporater to become syrup. The continuous heat of juice under heat resulted in the formation of syrup. in the next stage the syrup is allowed to centrifuge chamber and separation of crystals from syrup will happen here. Seperated cugar crystals are dried and cooled to get sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. Your overview also identifies the process as having seven steps and distinguishes cultivation and harvesting from later processing, which gives the reader a useful summary. The two harvesting methods and the limestone filter are relevant details. Some features are less fully reported: the diagram shows juice passing through the filter, syrup entering the centrifuge, and sugar crystals being separated before drying, but these transitions could be described more precisely. The overview’s claim that the process takes “more than a year” is also less exact than the stated growing period. More precise coverage would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by the early stages and then the later processing stages. Sequencing expressions such as “Overall,” “Later,” and “in the next stage” help guide the reader through the process. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “After they are allowed for manufacturing process” does not clearly explain the transition from harvesting to crushing, and “In production stage” is repeated in a way that makes the organisation less smooth. The paragraph break before the final stages is useful, but the overview could be separated more clearly and the body paragraphs could follow the diagram’s stages in more consistently grouped sections. Clearer referencing and transitions would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “cultivation,” “purification,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “separation of crystals,” so the stages are generally identifiable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “manufacturing stage.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “cone having limestone filter,” “allowed to centrifuge chamber,” and “continuous heat of juice under heat” do not express the process naturally. Spelling errors in “evaporater,” “Seperated,” and “cugar” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, conventional process language—for example, say that juice “passes through a limestone filter” and that syrup “is fed into a centrifuge.” This would make the vocabulary more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex structures, including passive forms such as “is grown” and “is purified,” which are appropriate for describing a process. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction, and punctuation are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. Examples include “A seven step process take” (the subject requires a singular verb), “The pre-production stage involve,” and “After they are allowed for manufacturing process,” where the reference and structure are unclear. The sentence beginning “The continuous heat of juice under heat resulted…” also has an unclear construction and tense. Capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent, as in “in the next stage.” Practise accurate passive clauses and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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