Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the process consists of seven main stages, beginning with the growing sugar canes and ending with the production of drying and cooling sugar crystals.

It involves both agricultural activities and indistriual tools for refining sugars.

According to the given data, sugar canses are take 12-18 months to grow and becoming mature. After that, it is go for the harvesting by machines and farmers to storing in a big area.

After harvesting, sugar canes put into machine to transform in juice and put juice into purifying process using limestone filter so it takes few times. All refind juice becomes syrup using evaporator which gives the heat to the juice so after few hours it transform into syrup.

After syrup, All syrup including crystals put into centrifuge machine for separates sugar crystals from syrup. Finally, drying and colling all sugar crystals in one area. After few days later, it will becoming cool so it goes for distriubution in the market.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence and give a clear overview that the process has seven stages, from growing cane to drying and cooling. You also include the stated growing period and identify harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation and centrifuging. However, some details are unclear or not supported by the diagram: cane is not shown being stored in a large area, the filter is not said to take “few times,” and no duration is given for evaporation or cooling. The final claim about distribution to market is also outside the information provided. To strengthen the response, describe what each stage visibly does, especially that the centrifuge separates crystals from syrup, and avoid adding unshown timings or outcomes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible order, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs that follow the production stages. Sequencing phrases such as “After harvesting,” “Finally” and “After that” help the reader follow the process, and the overall progression is clear. This is a solid organisational foundation. Some links are mechanical or imprecise, however: “After syrup” is an awkward transition, while “so” is used to connect several different cause-and-effect ideas in the purification and evaporation paragraph. The final paragraph also moves from drying and cooling to an unsupported distribution stage. Use more precise links such as “The purified juice is then heated” and keep each paragraph focused on the stages shown.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the stages. There is some attempt to use more specific terms, but spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and occasionally make the description less clear: “indistriual,” “canses,” “refind” and “colling” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “transform in juice,” “for separates sugar crystals” and “in one area.” Aim for accurate process collocations and consistent terminology—for example, cane is crushed to extract juice, and crystals are separated from syrup. Proofreading spelling and choosing natural verb-noun combinations would make your vocabulary more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overview uses a clear participle phrase: “beginning with … and ending with …”. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is uneven. Examples include “sugar canses are take 12-18 months to grow,” “it is go for the harvesting,” and “After harvesting, sugar canes put into machine,” where the verb forms or passive constructions are incomplete. The sentence beginning “After syrup” also lacks a clear grammatical connection between its clauses. Practise passive forms suited to process descriptions, such as “The canes are harvested” and “The juice is heated,” and check subject–verb agreement, articles and tense. More accurate sentence patterns will make the sequence easier to understand.

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