Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The diagram illustrates the miling process of sugar making from sugarcane.

Overall, it is clear that sugar canes take one and a half year to grow and then they are harvested and undergo crushing and many other different processes to transform into sugar.

The process of sugar making is dividied into secen parts. The first process is growing the sugar canes for 12-18 months in sugar cane fields. After that, the sugar canes are cut either through mechanical harvesting or manual harvesting. After harvesting, sugar canes are crushed in a machine which squeezes out the raw juice. The juice is purified through limestone filter. This purified juice is evaporated on heat into a syrup.

The syrup undergo a process of centrifuging which spins the basket fastly and separates sugar crystals from syrup. In the last process of sugar making, these sugar crystals then blasted with hot air to dry them out completely and then they are left to cool.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview identifies the overall transformation and the long growing period, while the body adds relevant details such as the two harvesting methods and the limestone filter. This gives a clear account of the process. One detail is not fully faithful to the diagram: it says the crystals are “blasted with hot air,” whereas the visual only shows drying and cooling and does not specify hot air. To strengthen the response further, keep descriptions closely tied to what is shown and make the overview more explicit about the process’s linear sequence and final product.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the stages. The sequence is easy to follow, and transitions such as “After that,” “After harvesting,” and “In the last process” help guide the reader through the diagram. The division between the earlier processing stages and the final separation and drying stages is also logical. Cohesion is generally clear, although some linking is repetitive and the overview partly repeats information that is then given in the body. You could make progression more polished by varying transitions and using concise references such as “the resulting juice” or “this syrup” to connect stages without repeatedly naming the material.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “mechanical harvesting,” “crushed,” “purified,” “evaporated,” and “centrifuging,” so the stages are generally communicated clearly. There are also attempts at more specific description, such as “squeezes out the raw juice.” However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “miling,” “dividied,” and “secen” are misspelled, while “fastly” is not the natural adverb in this context. “Sugar making” is also less precise than “sugar production.” Aim to check spelling carefully and choose standard process collocations; this will make the otherwise relevant vocabulary more accurate and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “a machine which squeezes out the raw juice” and a passive construction in “is purified through limestone filter.” Most sentences communicate the stages successfully, and the sequence of actions is understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with agreement and articles: “The syrup undergo” should be “The syrup undergoes,” and “through limestone filter” needs an article, as in “through a limestone filter.” The final sentence also has an unclear construction: “these sugar crystals then blasted” needs a passive verb, such as “are then dried.” Greater control of verb forms and articles, alongside your existing sentence variety, would improve accuracy.

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