Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This diagram illusrate the manufacturing process of sugar from sugar cane .

In first we can growing sugar cane in fields . It take time approximately 12 to months .When sugarcane is ready farmers harvest the sugar cane and load in their trucks .

Thrid step is crushing the sugarcane in machine and we get juice of sugercane . Fourth step is purfing the juice in limestone filter because the juice is clean waste material is aside .

Fifth process is evaporator the juice in high boiling point ad juice become syurp . In sixth process we por the syurp in centrifuge machine whish seperate the sugar from crystal syurp .

At last we pour the sugar in big drumps which take to drying and cooling . After all this process sugar is ready to eat .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the process as sugar production and report several central stages, including growing, crushing, filtering, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The growing period of 12–18 months is also included. However, the account is incomplete and sometimes inaccurate: harvesting is described as farmers loading cane into trucks, whereas the diagram shows mechanical and manual harvesting, and the final stage is described as pouring sugar into drums rather than drying and cooling it. There is no clear overview of the process from cane to finished sugar, and some explanations, such as the limestone filter removing waste, are not clearly supported by the diagram. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail provided. Cover every stage accurately and add a concise overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The stages are presented in a broadly chronological order, and sequencing phrases such as “Thrid step,” “Fourth step,” and “At last” help the reader follow the process. Separate paragraphs also give the response some organisation. However, the progression is not fully clear: the first stage begins with the awkward phrase “In first,” and the final paragraph introduces drums and readiness to eat without clearly linking these details to the diagram’s drying and cooling stage. Some transitions feel like a list of numbered steps rather than connected process description. Use a clear opening overview, then group the stages logically and connect them with accurate references such as “after the juice is purified” and “the resulting crystals are then dried and cooled.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, for example “illusrate,” “purfing,” “syurp,” and “drumps.” Some expressions are also imprecise for a process diagram: “high boiling point” does not clearly describe heating the juice, and “sugar from crystal syurp” confuses the materials being separated. Aim for accurate process terms and collocations, such as “heat the juice until it becomes syrup” and “separate sugar crystals from the remaining syrup.” Proofreading spelling would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to describe a sequence using both short statements and clauses, and the basic meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical errors are frequent, and the sentence patterns are mostly simple. Examples include “This diagram illustrate,” “It take time,” and “we can growing,” where subject–verb agreement or verb forms are incorrect. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in phrases such as “in machine” and “Fifth process is evaporator the juice.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, including spaces before full stops and missing spaces after them. Practise forming accurate passive and present-simple process sentences, for example, “The cane is crushed in a machine” and “The juice is heated until it becomes syrup.”

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