Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the given diagram illustrate the manufacturing process for making sugar from dugar cane the main features are as following.

firstly, sugar is produce from sugar cane, sugar cane growing 12 to 18 months at first step the the second step was harvesting, in which cutting the cane and putt them on a truck. Thirdly after harvesting the 3rd step was crushing that is simple in which sugar cane injected in machine and take juice as end product. after that in purifying juice with the help of limestone filtered.

hoever in another step juice becomes in syrup. after heat, centrifuge method used in whicch separate sugar crystals from syrup after drying and cooling sugar is ready as a result.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the process as sugar production and include several key stages, including growing for 12–18 months, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. However, the account is incomplete and some details are inaccurate or unclear: harvesting is described as putting the cane on a truck, whereas the diagram shows mechanical and manual harvesting, and the crushing stage is not explained clearly. There is no distinct overview of the process as a whole, and the final product is only briefly mentioned. The response also contains 118 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail you can provide. To improve, give a concise overview and describe each stage accurately, including how the juice becomes syrup and how crystals are separated from it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The stages are presented mostly in the correct order, and sequencing expressions such as “firstly,” “thirdly,” and “after that” help the reader follow the process. This gives the response some organisation. However, the progression is weakened by a lack of paragraphing and by sentences that run together or do not clearly connect, such as “after harvesting the 3rd step was crushing that is simple in which…” The transition “hoever in another step” is unclear, and the opening does not establish a clear overview before the details begin. Use one paragraph for an overview and another for the stages, and connect each step with accurate, varied transitions such as “The resulting juice is then…”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystals,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings reduce clarity: “injected in machine” does not describe cane being fed into a crusher, while “take juice as end product” is imprecise. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “dugar,” “hoever,” and “whicch,” and repeated use of basic terms such as “step.” Aim for precise process language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe the cane as being “fed into a crusher” and the juice as being “filtered through limestone.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe a sequence using both simple statements and clauses, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in “the given diagram illustrate” and “sugar is produce,” while “sugar cane growing 12 to 18 months” is missing a finite verb and a clear time expression. Several sentences are incomplete or awkwardly joined, particularly “after heat, centrifuge method used in whicch separate sugar crystals from syrup.” These problems sometimes make the process difficult to understand. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use the present simple consistently for process descriptions: for example, “The cane is crushed, and the juice is collected.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need attention.

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