Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The process diagram illustrates the production of suger from suger cane in a manufacturing cycle.

Overall, this is a process cycles of growing suger cane to making end product as a suger. this contains seven steps from growing it to getting suger.

Initially, suger can has grown by a farmer in there farm approximatly for 18 months depend on individual plant mature time. When plants get matured it harvest by a farmer via diffrent techniques like by hand or by machinary. although it may harvest in any technique. Afterwards, it crushed into crushing machine and juice of suger are get extracted followed by purification of that liquide. In prurification limestone filter it and it passed to the evaporation chambour. Evaporator is heated and produce syrup which is further goes in to the centrifuge and seprated into crystals and syrup. ultimatly, last step contains drying and cooling of the sugar. End result is served as a sugar to all peoples.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing and harvesting the cane through crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview also identifies a seven-stage process, which gives the reader a useful summary. However, some details are less fully or accurately reported: the diagram gives a growing period of 12–18 months, whereas you say “approximately for 18 months” and add that this depends on individual plants. The final claim that the product is “served as a sugar to all peoples” is not shown in the diagram. Explain the key transformations more precisely—for example, juice becomes syrup before the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from the remaining syrup—and avoid adding unsupported information.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by the stages in sequence, with transitions such as “Initially,” “Afterwards,” and “ultimately.” This makes the process generally easy to follow. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear. The overview repeats the idea of the process moving from growing cane to producing sugar, and “although it may harvest in any technique” interrupts the sequence without adding useful information. Some references are also difficult to track, as in “it passed to the evaporation chamber,” where the reader must infer that “it” means the juice. Use concise stage-to-stage links and name the material being processed when a pronoun could be ambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “purification,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range and control are limited by repeated use of “sugar” and “process,” several inaccurate word choices, and noticeable spelling errors such as “suger,” “diffrent,” “machinary,” and “seprated.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “production of sugar cane” and “served as a sugar to all peoples.” Choose precise process terms and natural collocations, such as “sugar is produced from sugar cane” and “the finished sugar is obtained.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding repetition would make the description clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a time clause (“When plants get matured…”) and a sequence linked with “followed by.” The stages remain broadly understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “this is a process cycles” has faulty agreement, while “it harvest by a farmer” needs a passive form such as “it is harvested.” In “juice of sugar are get extracted,” the verb construction and agreement are also incorrect. The overview contains a sentence fragment beginning “this contains,” and punctuation around sentence openings such as “although” needs attention. Practise accurate passive forms, which are especially useful for process descriptions, and check each sentence for a complete subject–verb structure.

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