Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram here shows the process of producing sugar from sugar cane.

Looking at the diagram, it is clear that producing sugarcane from sugar is a very lengthy and labour intensive process.

First, the sugarcanes are grown in the field. It's harvesting period is around 12-18 months. When the sugarcane is ready for harvesting it can be done manually or by tractor. Second, when all the harvesting is done it is crush using the juice machine. The juice produced by crushing the sugarcane is then purify by using filter and adding limestone in it. Further, the purified juice is then put on heat to become syrup and the excess of water will get evaporate. The syrup which is made from sugarcane at this stage is further separated using centrifuge, thus the crystals of sugar is made from that syrup. Moreover, the drying and cooling of these crystals are done to make the sugar out of it. Hence, the sugar is produced from sugarcane.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing and harvesting through crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. You also include the 12–18-month growing period and both harvesting methods, which are useful details. The overview identifies the process as lengthy, but “labour intensive” is not clearly supported because harvesting can be mechanical as well as manual. Some process details are also imprecise: the diagram shows juice passing through a limestone filter, rather than limestone being added, and the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup. To strengthen the summary, give a concise, accurate overview of the full sequence and describe the key transformations more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The stages are presented in a generally logical sequence, and linking expressions such as “First,” “Second,” “Further,” and “Moreover” help the reader follow the process. The response also moves from an introduction to a brief overview and then to the detailed stages. However, the repeated sequencing words make the progression somewhat mechanical, and the overview is not clearly separated from the stage-by-stage account. Some references, such as “it” in “it can be done manually or by tractor,” require the reader to infer that harvesting is meant. Use clearer paragraphing and vary the links by showing cause and sequence—for example, “After harvesting” or “The resulting juice is then…”—to make connections more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “purified,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals,” so the stages are mostly understandable. There are also attempts at more precise wording, such as “excess of water” and “separated.” Some choices are inaccurate or awkward for this diagram: “juice machine” is vague, “adding limestone” misrepresents the filter stage, and “sugar is produced from sugarcane” repeats the introduction without adding information. “Sugarcanes” is also less natural than “sugar cane” or “sugar-cane plants.” Aim for precise process terms and natural collocations, while avoiding repetition and unsupported descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional clause (“When the sugarcane is ready for harvesting…”) and a relative clause (“The syrup which is made…”). The sequence remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “It's harvesting period” needs the possessive “Its,” while “it is crush” and “is then purify” require passive forms: “is crushed” and “is then purified.” There are also agreement and article problems in “the crystals of sugar is made” and “the excess of water will get evaporate.” Review passive constructions, subject–verb agreement, and possessives, and proofread punctuation and spacing. More consistently accurate clauses would make the process description easier to read.

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