Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This is a process chart. It shows the manufacturing of making sugar from sugar cane. it has various stages .

After having a closer look at the chart, it is clear that. firstly, sugar cane are growing for 12- 18 months. Then, Harvesting of sugar cane takes place. Later on, Crushing of sugar cane takes place. After that, sugar juice is purified in limestone filter. subsequently, Sugar juice is heated and juice become syrup. In the perultimate step, The sugar cane crystals is separated from juice. In the last step, drying and cooling of sugar syrup takes place

it is the best method of manufacturing sugar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the process and include several correct stages, including the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting, crushing, limestone filtration, evaporation and final drying and cooling. However, the account is minimal and omits important information: harvesting can be mechanical or manual, and the centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup. The final sentence, “it is the best method,” is an unsupported opinion rather than a feature of the diagram. The response also falls 44 words short of the required minimum, which limits the detail you can provide. To improve, give a clear overview of the process from cane growth to finished sugar, then describe each stage accurately and avoid claims not shown in the visual.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The stages are presented in broadly the correct order, and sequencing expressions such as “Then,” “Later on,” and “After that” help the reader follow the process. This gives the response some organisation. However, the ideas are compressed into one paragraph, and the repeated stage-by-stage pattern makes the progression feel mechanical rather than developed. Punctuation also interrupts the flow, as in “it is clear that. firstly,” and the final opinion is disconnected from the process description. Use a brief introduction and overview, followed by a logically grouped account of the stages. Vary linking language and connect related steps, such as crushing and purification, more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “syrup,” and “drying and cooling,” so the reader can recognise the subject and many stages. However, the range is limited and some expressions are repetitive or unnatural, such as “the manufacturing of making sugar” and “sugar juice.” “Perultimate” is also an inaccurate word choice, and “sugar cane crystals” mislabels the crystals produced. Aim for precise process terms and natural collocations, for example “sugar production,” “cane juice,” and “in the penultimate stage.” More varied verbs such as “extract,” “filter,” and “separate” would help describe the stages clearly without repeating “takes place.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple sentences and a few sequencing clauses, so the grammatical range is limited. Errors occur in basic sentence construction and agreement: “sugar cane are growing” should be “sugar cane is grown,” and “The sugar cane crystals is separated” needs a plural verb and a clearer subject. There are also tense and article problems in “juice become syrup,” which could be written as “the juice becomes syrup.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “it” after a full stop and unnecessary capitals after commas. Practise accurate passive forms, which suit process descriptions, and combine them with a few controlled complex sentences.

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