Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of sugar from sugar cane. There are mainly seven steps included in the process, in order to make a fully eatable sugar for consumers use.

In the first step we need to irrigate the sugar canes in the fields and to make them grow fully we need to grown them for about(12 to18 months). When they are grown fully we can harvest them with the help of agricultural machines or we can also use our hands in order to harvest them.The third step is putting the sugar canes inside the machine so that their juice can be segregated. The next step includes purifying of juice with the help of limestone filter.

In the fifth step we need to evaporate the juice on high flame so that the juice can be converted into syrup.

The second last step includes a process of centrifuge in which the sugar crystals are separated from the syrup.

In the centrifuge process the sugar crystals are got separted in order to make them eatable product.The final process is the drying and cooling of sugar , finally they are now ready to use and can be sold out to markets for consumers use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers the main stages in the correct order, including the growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The stated 12–18 months and the separation of crystals from syrup are accurate. However, there is no distinct overview summarising the process as a whole; the opening only says there are seven steps. Some details are also imprecise or unsupported: the diagram shows cane being grown, not specifically irrigated, and it labels heat beneath the evaporator rather than saying the juice is heated on a “high flame.” The ending adds that the sugar is ready for consumers and sold to markets, which is not shown. A concise overview and closer adherence to the diagram would make the account more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The stages are generally presented in a logical sequence, and time and sequence markers such as “In the first step,” “The next step,” and “The final process” help the reader follow the process. The response also separates some stages into paragraphs. However, the organisation is somewhat mechanical, relying heavily on step-by-step transitions rather than grouping the process into clear phases. The centrifuge is described twice in succession, while the opening and conclusion do not provide a clear overview of the process’s overall progression. There are also run-on joins, for example where the harvesting sentence runs directly into “The third step.” Grouping the stages into cultivation/processing and final separation, and using clearer sentence boundaries and referencing, would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvest,” “purifying,” “evaporate,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals,” so the main operations are understandable. It also attempts more specific wording, such as “segregated” and “eatable,” but these choices are inaccurate or unnatural in context. “Extracted” or “released” would better describe juice coming from crushed cane, while “edible” is the appropriate term for food. Other awkward phrases include “consumers use,” “got separated,” and “sold out to markets.” Spelling errors such as “separted” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise process collocations and avoid adding consumer-related wording that the diagram does not require.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple sentences and some longer structures, such as “so that the juice can be converted into syrup,” and the sequence remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur. For example, “we need to grown them” should be “we need to grow them,” and “for about(12 to18 months)” needs clearer punctuation and spacing. The phrase “for consumers use” is missing a possessive form, and “the sugar crystals are got separated” uses an incorrect passive construction. Several sentences also run together, particularly the harvesting sentence and the following description of crushing. Use accurate verb forms and passive structures, and check sentence boundaries, articles, and punctuation. More consistently controlled complex sentences would strengthen the account.

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