Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the process of producing sugar from the sugar cane.

Overall, it is a seven stages process which starts the growing sugar cane and the ends and drying and cooling the sugar. It takes around 12 to 18 months for sugar cane to grow before it is ready for harvesting.

Firstly, the sugar cane is grown in field for about 12 to 18 months until it becomes fully mature. After that, the harvesting either by using special machines or by hand. In the third stages, the sugar cane is crushing in machines to extract it juice.

Nextly, the sugar is purified by passing it through limestone filter to remove the impurities. In the fifth stages, purfiyed juice is heated in evaporator, where the water is removed and juice becomes thick syrub.

Following this, the syrub is put into the centrifuge, which separate sugar crystal from the liquad. The sugar crystal are dried and cooled the sugar. As a result,the final product which is sugar, is ready for use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The overview identifies the seven-stage process and includes the 12–18-month growing period, while details such as the two harvesting methods and the limestone filter show good selection of relevant features. Some process details are less fully or precisely reported: for example, the diagram shows juice becoming syrup in the evaporator, but does not specify that water is removed, and the final sentence says the sugar is “ready for use,” which is not shown. To strengthen the response, keep explanations closely tied to what the diagram depicts and make the overview more clearly summarise the transformation from cane to sugar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall progression, with an opening overview followed by stages in sequence. Connectors such as “Firstly,” “After that,” “Nextly,” and “Following this” help the reader follow the process, and the final sentence provides a sense of completion. However, the linking is somewhat mechanical because most stages are introduced with a numbered or time-sequence phrase. There are also a few places where the connections between ideas are less smooth, such as “After that, the harvesting either…” and the abrupt shift from the centrifuge to the final product. Grouping related stages into paragraphs and varying transitions—for example, linking crushing directly to the juice purification stage—would make the progression more natural and cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “extract,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge.” These terms help communicate the stages, and the response generally remains understandable despite some inaccurate word choices and spelling. For instance, “Nextly” is not a natural transition, “syrub” is misspelled, and “the sugar crystal are dried and cooled the sugar” uses imprecise wording for the final stage. “Special machines” is also less specific than the diagram’s mechanical harvester. Aim for accurate spelling and natural collocations, and use precise process terms such as “mechanically harvested,” “sugar crystals,” and “dried and cooled” to describe the diagram.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is an attempt to use both simple and more complex structures, including the time clause “until it becomes fully mature” and the relative clause “which separate sugar crystal from the liquad.” The sequence is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. Examples include “it is a seven stages process,” “which starts the growing,” and “the harvesting either by using,” where sentence structure or verb forms are incomplete or inaccurate. Passive forms also need more consistent control: “the sugar cane is crushing” should be “the sugar cane is crushed,” and “juice is purified” is appropriate for describing a process. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms, and proofread sentence boundaries and spacing. More accurate control of these patterns would make the process description clearer.

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