Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given flow chart illustrates the various stages involved in the production of sugar cane.

Overall, it is quite visible that this is a process that comprises distinct steps those are interlinked with each other, however omission of any step may halt the entire procedure.

Looking at the details, at the initial stage of the process is to collect sugar cane for growing for 12 to18 months. Following this, the material is then transported to harvesting where it undergoes. Once tis part is completed, th subsequent step involves crushing the sugar canes for making a juice, after that juice is purifying with the help of limestone filter.

In the next stage, the semi-finished product is evaporator juice to make a syrup of sugar canes with the help of giving heat into its final shape. After the items are finally ready for centrifuge to separates sugar crystals from syrup. At this point, syrup is keep for drying and cooling to make sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the process as a sequence and include several key stages: growing for 12–18 months, crushing, limestone filtering, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying/cooling. This gives the reader a broadly accurate account. However, the overview is generic: saying that omitting a step may halt the procedure does not summarise the main features of this particular diagram. Some stages are also unclear or misrepresented. For example, the canes are grown before harvesting, rather than being collected for growing, and the final stage dries and cools the sugar crystals, not the syrup. Mentioning the two harvesting methods—mechanical and manual—and clearly explaining how juice becomes syrup and crystals would make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an overview followed by two paragraphs describing the stages in sequence. Connectors such as “Following this,” “Once this part is completed,” and “In the next stage” help signal progression. However, some links are mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between stages. The overview’s comment about omitting a step interrupts the process description rather than highlighting its main pattern, and “At this point” does not make clear what material is being dried. Grouping the stages more cleanly—from growing and harvesting, through juice processing, to the final sugar—would strengthen progression. Clearer references to the product at each stage would also help the reader follow the sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of process vocabulary, including “flow chart,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge.” These terms are relevant and show an attempt to describe technical stages. Some word choices and collocations, however, are inaccurate or awkward, such as “collect sugar cane for growing,” “transported to harvesting,” and “semi-finished product is evaporator juice.” “Final shape” is also vague for the production of sugar. These choices sometimes make the process difficult to interpret, even though the intended stages can generally be inferred. Use precise verbs for each transformation—for example, canes are harvested, crushed, and processed; juice is heated into syrup; crystals are separated, dried, and cooled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Once this part is completed” and a concluding sequence linked with “After.” However, some grammatical errors affect clarity. The opening detail sentence has a faulty structure: “at the initial stage of the process is to collect sugar cane for growing” needs a clear subject and accurate description of the stage. There are also problems with verb forms and agreement in “juice is purifying,” “centrifuge to separates,” and “syrup is keep.” The overview’s “steps those are interlinked” also needs a relative clause such as “steps that are interlinked.” Practise forming complete clauses and maintaining consistent passive forms when describing a process.

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