Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The processs diagrame depicts the manufacturing process how sugar is prodced from sugar cane.

Overall, there are several steps involved in digrame and it is a linear process while, beginnig with the growing shugar cane and ending wih the drying and cooling of sugar.

Firstly, sugar cabn is growing from 12 to 18 months when sugar can is completed plant then divided into two way started in haravesting mecahnically and technically. Following, sugar is collected by hand and tractor then sent into crushing and here sugar cane is made juice after all juice received purifying juice or juice is filtered when filtration is completed then next to juice sen to port here juice becomes syrup when they heated and some steam are evaporated next to centrifugal and are seprated into sugar and crystal froms syrup after when is seprated the furthermore sugar received in drum here are drying and cooling and suagr process complete here at the end stage

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct overall order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months to drying and cooling the finished sugar. The overview also identifies the process as linear and gives its beginning and end, which helps address the task. You include relevant details such as the two harvesting methods, crushing, filtering, heating and separation in the centrifuge. However, some stages are described unclearly or incompletely: for example, the account of purification does not clearly explain that juice passes through a limestone filter, and the evaporator and centrifuge stages are difficult to follow. Make each stage’s input and output explicit, and distinguish the sugar crystals from the remaining syrup to report the process more fully and precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening, an overview and a chronological account of the stages. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Following” and “next” help signal progression. However, most of the process is compressed into one long paragraph and a single extended sentence, so the relationships between stages are not always clear. Phrases such as “after all juice received purifying juice” and “after when is seprated” make it hard to see where one step ends and the next begins. Use separate sentences for the major stages, group related steps into paragraphs, and use clear links such as “After filtration” or “The syrup is then heated” rather than relying repeatedly on “next” and “after.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “filtered,” “syrup,” “centrifugal” and “drying and cooling.” This gives you a basic range for describing the process. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning difficult to recover, as in “processs,” “diagrame,” “prodced” and “seprated.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “sugar is collected by hand and tractor” confuses the cane with the sugar, while “juice received purifying juice” is not a natural description of filtration. Learn and check the key process terms, and choose precise verbs such as “passes through,” “is heated” and “is separated” to make the stages clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use both simple statements and longer sequences, and the opening and overview communicate the general topic and direction of the process. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is limited. For example, “sugar cane is growing from 12 to 18 months” needs a passive or process form such as “is grown for 12 to 18 months,” while “when sugar can is completed plant” has an unclear clause structure. The long final sentence joins many stages without reliable punctuation, and forms such as “when they heated” and “sugar received in drum” lack accurate tense or passive construction. Build shorter, complete sentences and practise consistent present-simple passive forms for process descriptions.

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