Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The rendered process in crystal clear delineation of making sugar from sugar cane

overall, there are many stages can be seen which start with growing of sugar and ends

with drying and cooling

It can be clearly seen that firstly sugar grow about 12 to 18 months then after this sugar harest by two methods firstly by harvesting machine and secondly harvest by hand moreover after harvesting it send for crushing in sugar canes then juice come out then juice send in purifying machine

Moving forward to remaining information of sugar making after purifying it send in evaporator then juice becomes syrup then syrup send in centrifuge separates sugar crystals from syrup moreover , after separation drying and cooling sugar were made and transport ti markets

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main sequence, from cane growth through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation and centrifuging to drying and cooling. The overview also correctly notes that the process begins with growing and ends with drying and cooling, and you include the 12–18-month growing period and the two harvesting methods. However, some stages are described unclearly, such as “juice send in purifying machine,” and the final claim that the sugar is “transport[ed] to markets” is not shown in the diagram. The response is also below the required 150 words, so there is limited space to explain the stages fully. Add detail about the limestone filter and heat, and avoid adding unsupported steps.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response follows the process in the correct general order, and the paragraph break between the overview and the stage-by-stage account helps distinguish these functions. Sequencing expressions such as “firstly,” “after this,” and “Moving forward” guide the reader through the stages. However, several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and links such as “moreover” are used where a simple sequence marker would be clearer. The second paragraph also repeats “then” and “after” without clearly separating each stage. Use one sentence per group of related stages, and make the transitions reflect the actual process—for example, “Next, the juice is filtered through limestone” before describing evaporation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “purifying,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which allows the reader to recognise the main stages. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “sugar grow” should refer to sugar cane growing, “harest” is misspelled, and “drying and cooling sugar were made” does not express the final stage naturally. “Rendered process in crystal clear delineation” is also an unnatural opening and does not add useful information. Aim for precise process language such as “the cane is harvested,” “the juice is purified,” and “the crystals are dried and cooled.” Check spelling and use standard terms consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a sequence linked with “then” and “after,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, there are some recurring problems with sentence structure and verb forms. For example, “there are many stages can be seen” needs a relative clause or passive construction, while “sugar harest by two methods” lacks an auxiliary and a correct verb form. In “after purifying it send in evaporator,” the subject and passive verb pattern are incomplete. Articles and agreement also need attention. Practise forming clear passive sentences for process descriptions, such as “The juice is heated in an evaporator,” and use full stops to prevent several stages from running together.

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