Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the 7 main steps to produce sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the process starts with cutting the ready sugar cane and end up by drying and cooling, passing by crushing, purifying, evaporating and centrifuging.

After a period of a year to year and half the sugar cane is ready for harvesting either using the tradition method or using a modern equipement. After that, it is crushed and converted into juice that will be passed through a limestone filter to remove any impurities.

After being purified, it enters an oven with high temperature, where it will evaporate and becomes syrup. Next, the syrup enters a centrifuging machine that rotates in high speed to separate sugar crystals from the syrup, whereas the outcome is dried and cooled to get the sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the seven-stage process and give a clear overall account, including the growing period and the final drying and cooling. The main sequence is mostly accurate: harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation and centrifuging are all covered. However, some details are less fully or precisely reported. “An oven with high temperature” is not shown; the diagram depicts an evaporator heated to turn juice into syrup. The harvesting methods are mentioned but not specified as mechanical and manual, and the final separation is described without clearly stating that the centrifuge separates crystals from syrup. The response is also 18 words below the required minimum. Add a little more accurate detail about these stages to make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is organised into an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs describing the stages, and the process generally moves in the correct order. Linking expressions such as “After that,” “After being purified,” and “Next” help the reader follow the sequence. This gives the account a coherent overall progression. To make the cohesion more flexible and precise, avoid relying mainly on time links and clarify the relationship between the final stages: for example, state directly that the centrifuge separates the crystals, which are then dried and cooled. The overview’s phrase “passing by” is also an awkward link between stages, so a more natural transition would improve flow. More consistent reference to the juice, syrup and crystals would further strengthen connections between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushed,” “limestone filter,” “evaporate,” “syrup” and “sugar crystals,” which makes the stages understandable. There is also some attempt at more specific language, such as “centrifuging machine.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this diagram: “tradition method” should be “traditional method,” “equipement” is misspelled, and “oven” is not the appropriate name for the equipment shown. “Passing by” and “rotates in high speed” are also awkward collocations. Aim for precise process terms and natural combinations, such as “mechanical harvester,” “evaporator” and “rotates at high speed.” These improvements would make the vocabulary more accurate and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple and more complex structures, including the overview sentence and the clause beginning “where it will evaporate.” Most of the process remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. In “the process starts … and end up,” the verb forms do not agree; use “starts … and ends.” “After a period of a year to year and half” has an unclear construction, and “where it will evaporate and becomes syrup” shifts verb forms inconsistently. The final sentence also needs a clearer grammatical link between the centrifuge’s action and the product being dried. Try maintaining consistent present-tense forms for a process description and checking articles and parallel verb structures. This would improve accuracy while preserving your range of sentence forms.

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