Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates how sugar is produced from sugarcane, showning seven stages from growning the plant to producing the final suagr.

Overall, it is clearly seen that the process starts from harvesting and cultivation of sugarcane and ends with drying and cooling sugar crystals. It involves several mechanical and chemical steps.

Initially, sugarcane is growning in 12-18 months untill it is ready for harvesting. The harvesting is done under two techniques with manually and by using machete. The harvested cane is then crushed in a machine to extract its juice.

In next steps, this extracted juice passes through a limestone filter to remove impurities. After that, its heated in a evaporator, where this juice is convert into syrup. Then, this syrup is plced in a centrifuge, which separate sugar crystals from syrup. In final stage, this crystals are dried and cooled to produce a refine sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence and include relevant details such as the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, filtering through limestone, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. The overview identifies the beginning and end and notes mechanical and chemical steps, although it would be clearer to describe the process as starting with cultivation rather than harvesting. Some details are inaccurate or imprecise: the diagram shows harvesting mechanically or by hand, not specifically with a machete, and the final product is labelled sugar rather than refined sugar. The explanation of what happens at the crusher and centrifuge is useful, but other stages receive less precise treatment. The response is also four words below the required minimum; add a little relevant detail to meet the task requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by the stages in sequence, with paragraph breaks that help distinguish the summary from the process details. Linking expressions such as “Initially,” “After that,” and “In final stage” make the progression easy to follow. This coherent organisation is a strength. However, some transitions and references are not fully controlled: “In next steps” is awkward, and “this juice” and “this crystals” are less clear or natural than direct references to the juice and crystals. The final paragraph also packs several stages into one block. To strengthen progression further, use consistent stage-to-stage links and ensure each reference clearly identifies the material being processed.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “extract its juice,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge.” These terms communicate the main operations and show some topic-specific range. However, several spelling errors—“showning,” “growning,” “suagr,” “untill,” and “plced”—reduce accuracy, while phrases such as “under two techniques with manually” and “a refine sugar” show imprecise word choice or form. “Machete” is also more specific than the diagram supports, which shows hand harvesting without naming the tool. Proofread carefully and favour precise process collocations, such as “harvested by hand or mechanically” and “produce refined sugar.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the relative clause “where this juice is convert into syrup” and the clause “which separate sugar crystals from syrup.” The sequence is generally understandable, and errors rarely prevent the reader from following the process. Some grammatical errors remain, however: “sugarcane is growning” needs a passive form (“is grown”), “its heated” needs “it is heated,” and “in a evaporator” requires “an.” There are also agreement and number problems in “which separate” and “this crystals are.” The opening overview’s “starts from harvesting and cultivation” is not a well-formed parallel construction. Check passive verb forms, articles, and singular/plural agreement, especially when describing each stage.

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